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Her eyes are as brown as the dirt below me,
Her lips are as red as a vibrant cherry,
Her hair flows gently down her face,
She’s the most beautiful thing I’ve ever seen,
Her body is perfect,
She's the girl for me.





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Maximum.Ride This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 29, 2011 at 6:10 pm

So cute! You should totally tell her.  I know if some guy told me that, I would be touched.

It's short, yet has meaning packed into every word. Very good!

 
Basketball23 said...
Mar. 18, 2011 at 6:58 pm
Awww this is so sweet!!!  If you told a girl this I know they'd melt and fall for you.  Only one thing...but don't take this the wrong way because it sounds amazing in the poem!!!...but you may not want to tell that certain girl that her eyes are the color of dirt.
 
Money.Man. replied...
Mar. 29, 2011 at 1:06 pm
Yeah your kind of right that might be taken as an insult! I worte this article for a girl that a really like but I never had the guts to give it to her.
 
Basketball23 replied...
Mar. 29, 2011 at 4:16 pm
Well you sound like a really sweet kid and I think that certain girl would be really lucky to have you.  I know I'm here to comment on your literature and not give you dating advice, but if I were you I would definitely give her the poem.
 
Money.Man. said...
Feb. 23, 2011 at 2:51 pm

Vote! Vote! Vote!

Also post comments on all of my work!!!

 
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