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He digs a boney thumb




Deep into hot sand.
Laughing.


Squishing
a n t s.




They are all so innocent.





And to think that now I am making them coffins out of pistachio




shells.



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FeedTheBirds said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 11:44 pm:

Love the first stanza. the "a n t s" is brilliant.

Question: Is there a narrator POV shift here? At first it is "he" killing the ants and then "I" making the coffins (out of shells which I LOVED). Are you implying there are two people there? Or is this a past/present scenario?

while I love the poem, these questions did frustrate me.

Can I just say again that I love your voice and await more of your work.

 
mariewonderlandx This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 8, 2011 at 8:18 am :

Hey!  Thanks so much, I appreciate the feedback.  

Yes, there are two people in this poem; myself and my old friend.

It is a childhood memory poems it is indeed in past tense.

 
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