Pulchritude

January 25, 2011
By mariewonderlandx SILVER, Rochester Hills, Michigan
mariewonderlandx SILVER, Rochester Hills, Michigan
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We could have been so











pulchritudinous,



Together


in
the sun.

But in the dark, crepuscular night,
You did
not believe





in us.


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on Feb. 8 2011 at 8:21 am
mariewonderlandx SILVER, Rochester Hills, Michigan
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Hey there, thanks again. :]

I'll admit that I do enjoy stanza breaks, but when I first posted these poems the "composition" of word placement was rearranged when I copied it over to the submission box.  This poem turned out correctly, but my others did not.

Sorry for the confusion!


on Feb. 7 2011 at 11:41 pm
FeedTheBirds SILVER, San Diego, California
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I've read all of your poems posted here and I LOVE your voice.

You are a fan of large spaces between words or stanzas. I understand this in one or two poems, but why do you do it in almost all? I feel like it is more effective employed with a bit more rarity.

In this poem, I do think the spacing works. I can't really explain why (frustratingly so), but when I read it in my head it made sense.

I love the word pulchritude (haven't heard it in a long while).

The whole poem -especially the contrast of day/night and believing by light and losing faith by darkness- snagged me for a few minutes while I read and reread it.

snaps.



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