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January 25, 2011
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We could have been so



the sun.

But in the dark, crepuscular night,
You did
not believe

in us.

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FeedTheBirds said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 11:41 pm

I've read all of your poems posted here and I LOVE your voice.

You are a fan of large spaces between words or stanzas. I understand this in one or two poems, but why do you do it in almost all? I feel like it is more effective employed with a bit more rarity.

In this poem, I do think the spacing works. I can't really explain why (frustratingly so), but when I read it in my head it made sense.

I love the word pulchritude (haven't heard it in a long while).

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mariewonderlandx This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 8, 2011 at 8:21 am

Hey there, thanks again. :]

I'll admit that I do enjoy stanza breaks, but when I first posted these poems the "composition" of word placement was rearranged when I copied it over to the submission box.  This poem turned out correctly, but my others did not.

Sorry for the confusion!

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