The Line

January 11, 2011
By lilworkerbeee SILVER, Thornwood, New York
lilworkerbeee SILVER, Thornwood, New York
7 articles 2 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
That which doesn't kill me can only make me stronger.


Some are stuck on one side
longing to meet the ones who dared.
Some are stuck on one side
wishing they could turn back time and wear a new face.
Maybe the line is invisible…

Some see a light in the future
and count the days until they can touch it.
Some see raging fire
and savor every last ounce of bliss in their life.
Maybe the line is invisible…

Where does joy
turn to agony?
Where does “I will”
turn into “I did”?
I want to know where the roads cross,
where the path ends,
where my life meets yours.

Where do fun and games
turn into pain and crime?

Maybe the line is invisible…


The author's comments:
I wrote this poem as a response to reading Lord of the Flies in my English class.

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on Feb. 9 2011 at 9:42 pm
WriterFanatic PLATINUM, DesMoines, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
A coward is incapable of exhibiting love; it is the prerogative of the brave.
By Gandhi.

Very Good! But the last line lost flow a little. 

Try more descriptive words

Like agony instead of crime

Keep it up=)


on Feb. 4 2011 at 2:41 pm
WinterFairy PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't dream it. Be it."
"Singing is praying twice, and dancing is singing with the body."
"Paper is more patient than man."
"Where you live shouldn't determine whether you live"

Really great stuff! :D

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on Jan. 31 2011 at 8:48 pm
Ugh..., Carolina Beach, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Strategy is everything" The Hunger Games

Ok I understand...You shouldn't be ashamed because this is really good but whatever you say Haha

on Jan. 31 2011 at 8:37 pm
lilworkerbeee SILVER, Thornwood, New York
7 articles 2 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
That which doesn't kill me can only make me stronger.

thats cool i hope you post some cool stuff

but um no thanks...id rather this totally be annonymous except for you knowing...please dont say anything? nobody else knows i write....


Ugh... said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 8:32 pm
Ugh..., Carolina Beach, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Strategy is everything" The Hunger Games

You inspired me I'm making an account. I'll post an excerpt from Chapter 4 for you and the public later. Do you want me to advertise your account on Facebook so our friends will see. I think they'll like it.

on Jan. 31 2011 at 8:25 pm
lilworkerbeee SILVER, Thornwood, New York
7 articles 2 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
That which doesn't kill me can only make me stronger.

thanks jakee =]

iJake96 said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 8:19 pm

Laura

This was great! Normally in a poem you don't get a build up but I felt as if it got better and more exciting towards the end. I especially liked the part when you said "Some see a light in the future / and count the days until they can touch it..." That was my favorite part. Really, really great. Can't wait to see more of your work.





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