Keep it a secret

January 13, 2011
By Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me


Don't tell anyone
Don't say it out loud
Keep it to yourself
Because it must be safe and sound

I hold you against your word
Don't lie to me
Don't tell anybody, please
Just listen and you'll see

You must keep it a secret
Nobody can know
Please keep it hush hush
And get down low

Shh, shh don't let anyone hear
Quick! Check behind!
Come closer, closer
Actually, never mind


The author's comments:
I like the last line, people always do that to me...!

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on Jul. 27 2011 at 6:39 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Yes, I love that last line. Haha. I thought you were going to spurge some secret or something. This was really good! :)

on Jul. 25 2011 at 5:42 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Haha I like this a lot :) you get so curious as you read, and are anticipating it then - nevermind :) nice work!

on Jul. 25 2011 at 5:31 pm
ohmakemeover BRONZE, Centerville, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Touch comes before sight, before speech. It is the first language and the last, and it always tells the truth."- Margaret Atwood

This seemed really fun and silly and sing-songy to me.  Very cute!

on Jul. 24 2011 at 6:45 pm
yellowflower SILVER, Basking Ridge, New Jersey
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I love the last line! Until it you are thinking that the poem is going to go a certain way and then all of a sudden the mood changes, it really gives it full impact! I can also totally relate to this, people always do the same thing to me!

on Jul. 24 2011 at 2:03 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

great poem i hope u keep writing and i agree with redhaircat i like the build up to never mind :P

on Jul. 23 2011 at 7:15 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Ha! The last line was great! You really build the poem up well for the last line!

on May. 31 2011 at 7:55 pm
krarthurs SILVER, Plymouth, Massachusetts
9 articles 3 photos 87 comments

Favorite Quote:
All generous minds have a horror of what are commonly called "Facts". They are the brute beasts of the intellectual domain.
-Thomas Hobbes

I love the suspense and how in the end it's a big flop. It made me laugh because this type of stuff always happens to me. Good job (:

on Mar. 25 2011 at 7:57 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

I loved it! (: Nice poetry ( I would write a longer comment, but I'm saving those for your other poems).

on Mar. 19 2011 at 9:31 pm
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

haha very relatable :) so true!

on Feb. 27 2011 at 2:54 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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:) I love it! It's so true. Very well written.

on Feb. 25 2011 at 6:18 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you, i wrote this when i was in one of my thinking phases...i go through them a lot!! And well i came up with this, i'm glad you liked it!!

on Feb. 25 2011 at 5:41 pm
CharlesDickens SILVER, Georgetown, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I do not agree with what you have to say, but I'll defend to the death your right to say it."
~Voltaire

This is a great poem!  I love how you worded this!

on Feb. 15 2011 at 5:30 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

Oooh, I love it! I like the way you rhymed things here, and I like the last line a lot too.




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