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Tangled Thoughts I Hear

December 7, 2010
By Anonymous

It's hard to write a little poem
about my thoughts and hurts.
I stop writing now and then
because it's just a blur.
My mind is jumbled and jammed.
I might just want to scream.
Instead, I take my anger out
on this paper, it seems.
You should know this is a distraction.
I'm not supposed to eat.
I'll get fat. I'll be mad,
and it's me I'll want to beat!
I'll be skinny. Wait for the day.
I'll be happy and free!
Now, it's all I think about.
I'm getting my thoughts out.
You see?!?!?
Here I go. I stopped again.
Five minutes to think.
This is my first poem,
yet, my paper's filled with ink!
Now, I'm tired. It's only 7:35.
I'd love to go outside
and look up at the sky.
It's chill out there.
Maybe tomorrow or the next.
It's the beginning of December.
What do you expect?
Well, goodnight my friend.
Wherever you are.
I'll wish to meet you one day
on the next shooting star.
We'll meet one day.
We shall laugh and cry.
We'll understand each other.
I'll see the hurt in your ours.
You see now?
Goodbye.
Sweet Dreams.
Je T'aime.
I'm giving my brain a rest.
Goodnight little lamb.



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on Jan. 19 2011 at 5:08 pm
peachy37 BRONZE, Opelousas, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"The ones we love never truly leave us." --Albus Dumbledore

"The real voyage of discovery consists not in seeking new landscapes but in having new eyes." --Marcel Proust

Thank you!

bigdreamer14 said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 12:23 pm
bigdreamer14, Y Ya Need To Know???, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
You can say that I'm a talented writer, but all I can do is write down my feelings on paper and form them into sentences with my own personal flavor.

Really like this and the bit where you start talking about how your fat and ramble and then straighten yourself out to tell us that you have done that again. It's really well written. However, I think you can minimize some of the good-byes that you have added. Overall, excellent work and, just like someone mentioned, if this really is your first poem, than this is exceptionally well done. =)

DrDoofenTess said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 1:39 am
DrDoofenTess, Dubai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Hope for the best .... Expect the worst .

i can really feel the commotion of thoughts in ur head ... feel the emotions crowding inside of you when i read what u write ....hope you meet that friend who can help you with ur hurt n share a couple of moments of happiness with u

and talkin about it as a writen piece ..... it very subtly puts across what u feel without doing it soo pointedly . and REALLY good for a first poem

explore yourself and your emotions .... and keep that pen and paper ready for those perfect lines to drift thru ur head


on Jan. 18 2011 at 1:08 pm
peachy37 BRONZE, Opelousas, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"The ones we love never truly leave us." --Albus Dumbledore

"The real voyage of discovery consists not in seeking new landscapes but in having new eyes." --Marcel Proust

Thank you so much! :)

on Jan. 18 2011 at 12:37 pm
shakes11 SILVER, Belton, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
\"Decide that you want it more than you are afraid of it.\" - Bill Cosby

\"Cowards die many times before their deaths,
The valiant never taste of death but once.\" -Shakespeare

Love it! Very real and interesting...

on Jan. 17 2011 at 9:15 pm
hurshikissx3 PLATINUM, Merrimca, Massachusetts
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cute! If it really is your first poem, impressive!