December 24, 2010
When life gives you lemons,
you are told to make lemonade,
what are these metaphorical lemons?
the hardships we face,
the tears we shed,
or the laughs we cherish?
what is the lemonade?
the promise of something better,
the hope we hold dear,
or the words we whisper,
like something precious,
we hold on to the threads of life.

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leafy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 6:34 pm
along with the others, i like this poem too. my only suggestion is too use capitalization and too put a semicolon or period after "or the words we whisper." but other than that, i liked this poem a lot. keep up the goo work!
Raytheraym replied...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 7:23 pm
Thanks! That's just the way I write poems.
Gettysburg63 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 26, 2011 at 5:21 pm
Great work on the poem. Short, sweet, and to the point. I hope it gets published. Keep up the good work.
Raytheraym replied...
Mar. 26, 2011 at 5:47 pm
Thank you very much!
HaleyDRog. said...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 1:16 pm
This one was tremendous. Nice job!
Raytheraym replied...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 3:34 pm
Thanks! :)
beach said...
Mar. 13, 2011 at 1:52 pm
i really liked this poem, it was an intresting poem (good intresting) great job!
Raytheraym replied...
Mar. 13, 2011 at 2:35 pm
Thank you!
Medina D. said...
Feb. 26, 2011 at 8:47 pm

It's short but sweet!

The words sound pretty and are SOO true!! Thats the best part about them!!

i really like this poem!

I'm guessing from your other comments that your gonna reply with a thank you (NO NEED thank YOU for explaining what the metaphor means because all this time i walked around clueless)

Raytheraym replied...
Feb. 26, 2011 at 9:06 pm
And thank you so very much! I'm glad you liked it so much. :)
tell.me.that.youll.stay said...
Feb. 18, 2011 at 11:28 pm
wow. this is perfectly put... it makes total sense, Goood job!! :^D
Raytheraym replied...
Feb. 19, 2011 at 12:10 pm
Thank you!
SpringRayyn said...
Feb. 14, 2011 at 9:20 pm
I like it mostly. The one line that says "what are these metaphorical lemons?" seems too long.
. replied...
Feb. 15, 2011 at 3:39 pm
Thanks! :)
Volleystar15 said...
Feb. 14, 2011 at 6:45 pm
i like the explanations really makes the lemonade metaphor understandable. nice work!!
Raytheraym replied...
Feb. 14, 2011 at 9:03 pm
Thank you!
lilmartz This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 11, 2011 at 8:34 am
I like this! It's a nice and poetic way of explaining the metaphor. Good job :)
Raytheraym replied...
Feb. 11, 2011 at 5:53 pm
Thank you!
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