December 2, 2010
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I cover my face wih my jacket
As the sounds around me go mute
And the sweet fragrance of my perfume gets louder
As my warm breath covers my face with heat
As my body relaxes and my heart beat slows
One yawn,
Thats all i need
And slowly i go spiraling
Into that coma like sleep
...Right in the middle of English class:)

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OriginalCarbonation said...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 9:37 pm
i LOVE how you amke the smell get "louder"!! that is just amazing!! it has a nice ring and a certain hidden rythm, and somehow manages to capture perfectly a simple little moment. that is very difficult, so good job! (and ironic ending?  oh yes :D )
SpringRayyn said...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 12:44 am
hahaha I love the last line! C: I also like how you said "Sweet fragrance of my perfume gets louder" instead of "stronger." I like to describe senses that aren't hearing as getting louder too! Like once I was describing clarinets and I said "the lights brighten and the keys sparkle louder." Okay, back to my point, this poem is hilarious and nicely put together.
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