I Miss My Daddy

November 20, 2010
By Krista Swift BRONZE, Wellington, Florida
Krista Swift BRONZE, Wellington, Florida
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When I was only two years old,
My daddy went away.
He swore he'd always love me,
But he said he couldn't stay.
Days turned into weeks
And weeks turned into years.
I never saw my father,
He never saw my tears.
He told me to touch the star,

He believed in me I could.
So why did he go far?
He never read me bedtime stories
Or tucked me in at night.
He never showed up for my birthdays,
But I always hoped he might.
He missed my first day of kindergarten
And all of my school plays.
He doesn't know how smart I am,
My report cards full of A's.
Sometimes I want to call him
To say Hey Dad I'm still alive!
I'll be 15 years old soon,
Will you teach me how to drive?
It’s almost time for college,
The years go by so fast.
I'm looking forward to my future,
But I'm still trapped within my past.

I guess I'll never understand,
Did I do something bad?
My parents got divorced,
But why did I lose my dad?
He was like my sky,

Sometimes it just makes me so sad.


The author's comments:
Listening to a Taylor Swift song inspired me to write this.

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on Dec. 11 2010 at 11:29 am
BlackVeilBride15, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
" My plan is to forgive and forget. Forgive myself for being stupid, and forget you ever existed..."

I never lost my dad. I have had him in my life since i was born. But i wouldn't know what i would have done if i grew up without a dad. I feel sorry for the ones that grew up without one. I can truly say that I am sorry that you don't have a dad. And i really like this Free Verse, even though i can't relate to it.

on Dec. 10 2010 at 9:52 pm
Monkee63 SILVER, Independence, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"I want to feel my life while I'm in it"- Meryl Streep
"Live, Life Love"
"Everybody wants happiness, nobody wants pain, but you can't have a rainbow without a little rain."

Thats reall touching to me...especailly since my da left when I was like 3 but now I have him back in my life and i feel so amazingly blessed to be able to have my whole future ahead of me with my dad...this poem is a sure explanation of the way I felt..these last 13 yrs....thats what makes the best poems the ones that the readers can relate too...great job with this I love it! :)

kp321 said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 7:13 pm
This is really great! It makes me glad that my daddy is always there.

dml6609 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 2:18 pm
dml6609 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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This poem is so touching. I love the rhyme. It is more fun to read poems with rhyme because I love finding the rhyming words. I also love that this poem is more like a story. I loved how the poem did not say what happened to the dad until the end. It kept me wondering what happened. "He swore he'd always love me" made me think about how it must feel. This poem is great and in perfect order. I would just want to hear more about the mom. Maybe she was a big influence in this poem.

lh506 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 1:29 pm
lh506 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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From your poem I can tell that you're going through pain at the moment. I can't say I can relate to you in this situation, but I just want to tell you cherish the close ones you have in your life now. I'm sure your father still thinks about you, and he deeply still loves you, but I want you to know that one day you will see your father again. 

on Dec. 10 2010 at 12:50 pm
Rachel Williams,
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very touching. much emothion. good work bro. i like it

MAB301 said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 10:58 am
MAB301, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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"Days turned into weeks

And weeks turned into year.

I never saw my father,

He never saw my tears."

These were the best lines, they explained how long your father was away.  These lines also explained how your father missed pieces in your life. These lines are missing the happy parts of your life. A person would be able to connect more to these lines if there were specific examples of hard/happy times in your life. 


bjb103 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 10:24 am
bjb103 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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That was so touching! I feel the same way. I wonder about the things that happen with my parents. I can relate to this poem. This is a wonderful poem. I would suggest, to talk more about the mother. The line "I guess I'll never understand" thats my favorite line because thats how I fell.

on Dec. 10 2010 at 9:52 am
bluegirl440 DIAMOND, Park City, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Everybody lies. -House

This is very powerful and moving...great job.

on Dec. 10 2010 at 9:01 am
ShelbyMarie93 PLATINUM, Lexington, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
"When Death to either shall come -- I pray it be first to me." ~Robert Bridges
or
"Life is not a jump; it's a headfirst dive."
or
"Within you I lose myself; without you I find myself wanting to be lost again."

╔══╗
╚╗╔╝
╔╝(¯`v´¯)
╚══`.¸.Isaac H.

This is amazing. I loved it. Such a way with words...check out some of my work? :)


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