death by life

November 20, 2010
in the days of my life
i find myself waiting
waiting, waiting, waiting
for something
i draw for the light
and write for the darkness
to many things happen
and so i find myself
slipping, slipping, slipping
into darkness, into death
finally my heart stops beating
and i stop breathing

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poetrygirl411 said...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 3:52 pm
This is really good only thing i would say is use words with description described how lonely your heart is, how you ache for someone to break through the barriers that have been set up without the consent of the one person i surrounds.  That's all that i can suggest....keep on writing your poetry it is really good i can relate to everything.  Please don't take this negatively it is a positive comment just with a few words of wisdom i suppose.  You can take them or you can leave t... (more »)
LaShay_25 said...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 1:45 pm
Lonely night... this is how I feel... I can't handle the silence... Your poem is amazing =]
lovelifelollypops said...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 1:12 pm
i can really relate to this its amazing....great stuff :)
Aurorarollercoaster said...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 11:44 am
this is an amazing poem =) i love the meaning and can relate as well. If this is about you and not ficyional to you, i hope you can find the light that will make you happy and love life. =) good luck 
Aurorarollercoaster replied...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 11:45 am



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