Envious

November 17, 2010
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Envy,jealousy, longing
a clenching in your chest
looking at what you want
instead of the hard reality

Mixed feelings of hate
with dispair and distaste
what would it be like
to be them

Surge of hope and loss
hopes raised
to be plummeted
further and further down

What would it be like
to be them
just for a day
or a moment





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CountryGothic said...
Dec. 7, 2010 at 12:21 pm

Very good poem of free verse with stanzas, the meaning is clear, concise, and completely relatable.
 
LaShay_25 said...
Dec. 7, 2010 at 8:58 am
Umm...I thought it was good but at least I know I'm not the only one who envy people but still wonder how easy it is to be them. I like ur poem =]
 
shellbelle524 said...
Dec. 7, 2010 at 8:57 am
I related to this poem well because they're many envious people in the world. I wouldn't want to experience envying someone,but I have before. I was pleased with the tone of the poem as well, it felt calm and serene. 
 
mwahxandxmwa said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 4:27 pm

This is really nicely written. It has good depth and also flows very well.You are right we all feel envy and it is unfortunate...although it is felt with such compoassion. Amazing MWAH.

If you get a chance could you please check out some of my stuff! Mwah :D

 
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