Good Mourning Dawn

November 10, 2010
By Jule92xc BRONZE, Smithsburg, Maryland
Jule92xc BRONZE, Smithsburg, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not who I am underneath, but what I do that defines me..." -Batman


Good mourning Dawn
For the lovely Night
Those lovely tears
Reflect the light
Standing there
As still as stone
Still afraid
To be alone
Light's reaction
To Night's attraction
Sun still rises
Rays in crisis
Clouds retreating
Softly weeping
Moonlight lies
Sweet love dies
And all around the world Dawn cries.


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on Feb. 22 2011 at 4:15 pm
lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
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Live Life Like A Party That Never Ends

This is so good! Simple, but deep. I know this is minor, but personally I would have broken up the last line into 2 lines and taken out the "and" so that it read:

"All around the world

Dawn cries"

 

Other than that, nice job! This is one of your best I would say.


on Dec. 1 2010 at 10:22 am
Jule92xc BRONZE, Smithsburg, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not who I am underneath, but what I do that defines me..." -Batman

Thank you so much!

on Nov. 29 2010 at 4:26 pm
maybesomeday2 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"if we begin to discover a feeling within ourselves that nothin in this world can satisfy we should begin to wonder if perhaps we were created for another world" -C.S Lewis

wow, these words r incredible..to me this simply shows how beautiful new beginnings can be :) awesome job

on Nov. 28 2010 at 5:52 pm
day_dreemer BRONZE, Northfield, New Jersey
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Wow is really all i have to say. When i read it, i was in awe of he power of your words. it really is incredible.

on Nov. 28 2010 at 4:28 pm
StormyxD SILVER, Winter Park, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Late at night my mind would come alive with voices and stories and friends as dear to me as any in the real world. I gave myself up to it, longing for transformation." - Jo March, Little Women

The first time I read it meaning didn't really sink in, but then I went back and WOW. great job. :)

on Nov. 28 2010 at 12:26 am
Jule92xc BRONZE, Smithsburg, Maryland
3 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's not who I am underneath, but what I do that defines me..." -Batman

Thank you so much =]

I really like your interpretation, and it's really cool to hear what it means to other people. That's not exactly what it means to me, but I wrote it hoping that it would mean different things to different people.


on Nov. 27 2010 at 9:10 pm
kriley8404 BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"jesus is love, love is real"

I don't know if you wrote this and it just turned out well, but heres what it means to me:

Dawn seems like a play on words to me, to dawn is to suddenly click. Something has sunk in and it is late at night and tears are rolling off. When you say lights reaction to nights attraction, it means when darkness crowds in good, the reaction is to still like stone and be afraid. When the sun still rises it means time stops for no ones pain and moonlight lies means that feeling lingers. The last line, to me, means that the world is emersed in pain when the truth of things finally dawns on them.

Anyway, its beautiful :)


Carrich said...
on Nov. 26 2010 at 9:06 pm
I loved this! It was light, but full at the same time. The words were smooth-they flowed in a way that kind of just mde me jump into the poem. Keep it up!

on Nov. 26 2010 at 11:21 am
starlight26 GOLD, Miramar, Florida
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*life isnt about pretending to be something you're not. It about being who you are and finding someone
who loves every bit of it."

"Life's tradegy is that we get old too soon and wise too late"

OH MY GOSH. THIS IS SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO GOOD! One of my all time favorites. Light's reaction to Nights attraction..simply beautiful.I love love love love it!Check out some of my work because it would be great if we could talk. :) Great job

Akzca BRONZE said...
on Nov. 26 2010 at 8:00 am
Akzca BRONZE, MONROE, Ohio
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"Dont let your dreams be dreams"~~Jack Johnson

This is really really good! :)

on Nov. 25 2010 at 8:40 pm
Jule92xc BRONZE, Smithsburg, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not who I am underneath, but what I do that defines me..." -Batman

Thank you so much everyone!

on Nov. 24 2010 at 6:45 pm
claire-baire BRONZE, Lafayette, Louisiana
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you wouldn't have to get over me if you were still under me

i abousolutly LOVE IT!!!!!!!!

Lay18 PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 24 2010 at 4:19 pm
Lay18 PLATINUM, Portsmouth, Virginia
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amazing poem!!!!!!

can you check out some of my work?


on Nov. 24 2010 at 9:44 am
MeanPeopleDead SILVER, Rouseville, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"i yam what i yam and that's all that i yam" -popeye, the sailor man
"it's better to burn out then to fade away" -kurt cobain

this is beautiful!


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