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Good mourning Dawn
For the lovely Night
Those lovely tears
Reflect the light
Standing there
As still as stone
Still afraid
To be alone
Light's reaction
To Night's attraction
Sun still rises
Rays in crisis
Clouds retreating
Softly weeping
Moonlight lies
Sweet love dies
And all around the world Dawn cries.



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lilmartz This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 4:15 pm:

This is so good! Simple, but deep. I know this is minor, but personally I would have broken up the last line into 2 lines and taken out the "and" so that it read:

"All around the world

Dawn cries"

 

Other than that, nice job! This is one of your best I would say.

 
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maybesomeday2 said...
Nov. 29, 2010 at 4:26 pm:
wow, these words r incredible..to me this simply shows how beautiful new beginnings can be :) awesome job
 
Jule92xc replied...
Dec. 1, 2010 at 10:22 am :
Thank you so much!
 
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Cassie W. said...
Nov. 28, 2010 at 5:52 pm:
Wow is really all i have to say. When i read it, i was in awe of he power of your words. it really is incredible.
 
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StormyxD said...
Nov. 28, 2010 at 4:28 pm:
The first time I read it meaning didn't really sink in, but then I went back and WOW. great job. :)
 
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kriley8404 said...
Nov. 27, 2010 at 9:10 pm:

I don't know if you wrote this and it just turned out well, but heres what it means to me:

Dawn seems like a play on words to me, to dawn is to suddenly click. Something has sunk in and it is late at night and tears are rolling off. When you say lights reaction to nights attraction, it means when darkness crowds in good, the reaction is to still like stone and be afraid. When the sun still rises it means time stops for no ones pain and moonlight lies means that feeling lingers. The las... (more »)

 
Jule92xc replied...
Nov. 28, 2010 at 12:26 am :

Thank you so much =]

I really like your interpretation, and it's really cool to hear what it means to other people. That's not exactly what it means to me, but I wrote it hoping that it would mean different things to different people.

 
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Carrich said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 9:06 pm:
I loved this! It was light, but full at the same time. The words were smooth-they flowed in a way that kind of just mde me jump into the poem. Keep it up!
 
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starlight26 said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 11:21 am:
OH MY GOSH. THIS IS SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO GOOD! One of my all time favorites. Light's reaction to Nights attraction..simply beautiful.I love love love love it!Check out some of my work because it would be great if we could talk. :) Great job
 
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Akzca said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 8:00 am:
This is really really good! :)
 
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claire-baire said...
Nov. 24, 2010 at 6:45 pm:
i abousolutly LOVE IT!!!!!!!!
 
Jule92xc replied...
Nov. 25, 2010 at 8:40 pm :
Thank you so much everyone!
 
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Lay17 said...
Nov. 24, 2010 at 4:19 pm:

amazing poem!!!!!!

can you check out some of my work?

 
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MeanPeopleDead said...
Nov. 24, 2010 at 9:44 am:
this is beautiful!
 
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