Those a Part of Me

November 4, 2010
By xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3


It hurts when you treat me like I'm not good enough,
it kills when you tell me.
Is it so hard to be supportive?
To care, to be loving?
Why can't it just be a normal foundation,
full of happy memories,
containing irrevocable and unconditional love?
Why can't it be like a family?
The way it used to be-
undeniably different from now.
But, please-
with all the damage and scars you have engrained in me,
I think you deserve to take a bow.
But remember to open up the curtains so everyone can see,
just the kind of cold monster that you aren't afraid
to show me.



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on Apr. 27 2013 at 12:00 am
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

Thank you so much; I really appreciate it :) I was trying to make the structure almost parallel the meaning in a way by starting off slow and sad and finishing off strong because in those types of bring-me--down-situations, it is key to remain strong. Thanks again for taking the time to read (:

on Mar. 21 2013 at 11:23 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

  Preferences § 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 - = Backspace   Tab q w e r t y u i o p [ ]   Return     capslock a s d f g h j k l ; ' \   shift ` z x c v b n m , . / shift     English     Deutsch   Español   Français   Italiano   Português   Русский   alt alt     Preferences I love this! So very, very powerful! My favorite is the ending "But, please- with all the damage and scars you have engrained in me, I think you deserve to take a bow. But remember to open up the curtains so everyone can see, just the kind of cold monster that you aren't afraid to show me." This is an absolutely wonderful piece! Keep up the great work!

on Mar. 20 2013 at 10:32 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
22 articles 0 photos 281 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

Thank you ! I'm glad you like it :)

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on Feb. 13 2013 at 6:39 pm
Jaki913 BRONZE, Apopka, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Maybe on the outside I'm not your typical guy, but up here I am."

that is one of the most amazing poems i've read... it shoes kind of a sweet innocence mixed with a strong oppinion without making you sound needy...  i really enjoyed it


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