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You Never Held Me Up..

Can’t you see that you’re the one for me?
Didn’t you know I wasn’t ready to let go?
I loved what we had.
So why does it have to end on a note so bad?
You promised you wouldn’t hurt me.
You said you would try and help
And all I could do
Was play the cards that were dealt.
I tried my hardest not to loose this game.
I lost, but am not the one to blame.
For it is you that should feel ashamed
You mislead me with your gorgeous smile.
That made the time we shared all worth wile.
Out of all of the people in the world,
You’re the one I can’t stand,
So why do I still long for your hand?
I am finally done with all our fights
So why is it hard for me to sleep at night?
Why can’t you realize how much I need you?
I just want to hear “I love you too.”
I want to know this isn’t the last straw,
I want to know you didn’t go far.
I’m not ready to start over,
Not ready to cry upon another shoulder.
It is you I want.
And you only,
Without you I feel terribly lonely.
Not sure if I am strong enough to continue alone.
Didn’t you see, that when times got rough,
It was you I needed to hold me up?
But this time, you’re the one that made me fall
Through your fingers I slipped,
And lost it all.



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xXBrokenxNightmareXx said...
Nov. 19, 2010 at 12:04 pm

This was truely amazing...I love the flow of it and how the words just seem to fall into place with one another....^^....You should totally check out some of my work, I think you will like em....But the one I think you would like the most is unforgiven....Keep up the good work :D

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deeds14 said...
Nov. 18, 2010 at 1:09 pm

 

This is an amazing poem , It kind of reminds me of a song for some reason . lol, well anyways goood job and i hope to read more by you (: 

 
Cella000 said...
Nov. 18, 2010 at 10:51 am
Very good(: Keep up the good work. ((: ^^
 
shannon marie bagans said...
Nov. 18, 2010 at 9:45 am
love thiss! soo cutee! </3
 
LilBenj This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 18, 2010 at 12:21 am
You're a good writer - I guess I just find the subject matter a little cliche. There are too many over-used phrases. It just doesn't reach me.
 
nickykens This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Nov. 18, 2010 at 6:44 pm
I agree completely.  Good poem but it doesn't stand out from any others.  With a little more work and practice, you could be amazing. (not that I'm an expert)
 
kmarie14 said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 10:33 pm
WOW!!!!! :) this peom is well beautiful you are seriously talented, never stop writing! Check out my work? I'd love to hear your opinion :)
 
fearlesslybeyourselff said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 5:32 pm
AMAZING! MY FAVORITE BY FAR! THE FLOW IS AMAZING AS WELL, AND THIS DEPICTS MY LIFE SO WELL
 
sunnyandsugarThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 12:44 pm
aww that was soo moving and i completly feel the same way.. great job
 
bluegirl440 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 9:55 am
Wow this is absolutly fantastic....I know someone like this
 
Simply,Savannah replied...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 10:47 am
Thanks bluegirl440
 
MelanieElizabeth_18 said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 9:32 am
i seriuosly love this! its amazing!
 
dymond jones said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 9:15 am
really good!!!!!!!!!
 
.babycakes. said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 9:05 am
i really like this poem and i feel i can relate.atleast from the standpoint of heartbreak.i was with a guy for a year and 4 days after that one year i found a girl in his bed :(
 
Simply,Savannah replied...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 10:46 am
:( Thats extremly unfortunate, i'm sorry for that. but, i am glad my writing could reach you. (:
 
MRose911 said...
Nov. 16, 2010 at 10:06 pm
AMAZING!!! You have a gift! :) Please check out some of my work if you get the chance. I would love to hear your opinion!
 
Simply,Savannah replied...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 12:41 pm
I like a lot of your stuff, i intend to comment on your work, just at a later date. But, good job! keep writing bbg (:
 
Swim Nut said...
Nov. 16, 2010 at 9:45 pm
I can relate to this.  I'm thinking of breaking up with my boyfriend, and wondering if he will feel like this.  He likes me, a lot, and were just not right for eachother.  I don't want to hurt him though.
 
Simply,Savannah replied...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 10:47 am
You have to do what's best for you. Breakups hurt, but in the long run you need to focus on how you will benifit. Keep your head up sweetie.
 
Audra M. said...
Nov. 16, 2010 at 9:33 pm
this is a wonderfully great thought out poem it is really good i loved it. :)
 
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