The Quiet Boy

October 30, 2010
There's a boy down the street
He rarely ever speaks
His parents are divorced
And he just moved to a new town

At school he is the outcast
Which only makes things worse
No one wants him around
They believe that he's a freak

No one knows the pain he feels
Therapy won't help
Because he never has support
Not even from his parents

He knows no one that is like him
He believes that he is all alone
That no one wants him around
Just a simple hello would help
But no one will talk to him
They just keep walking when they see him

A little girl of age five walks down the street
She sees the quiet boy
And walks up to him
She says "Hey mister, are you okay?"
The boy looks up, and smiles
The first smile he has smiled in a long time

From then on the boy always tried to stay on the bright side of life
But he had his struggles
But life always comes with it's struggles
And he will always remember the little girl
Who said hello.

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BrightBurningCampeador This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 10, 2011 at 8:12 pm
I think you should chnage the first two lines of the last stanza. Make it a different tense maybe, and get rid of the "but". It's kinda repetitive to have "but" two lines lines in a row.
AshTree said...
Nov. 22, 2010 at 10:55 pm
I like it, but I think it could flow better. It is a little choppy in some places and you repeat things. And don't forget to show instead of tell! This is really good tho!
iluvnacho replied...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 7:14 pm
Aww, this is really sad, but good. I liked how you ended it with the little girl. you should submit more. you're a very good writer in the forums.
black_angel replied...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 5:10 pm

This is pretty darn good :) :P i agree it could flow better but otherwise, good job!! :D

miss you:)

your friend,


Winged.Living.Free.This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 17, 2012 at 5:01 pm
Great job, sad. . .
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