The Wind

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Blew against everything
flowers, trees, hair
they even help you
fight against a bear.

When you ride in a car
and the window is down
the wind wakes you up
and your hair goes round and round.

When your tired
and you want to get away from all the stress
all I do really is go outside
and let the wind put me to rest.

You would think its quiet
but there is a noise
not so loud though
not like 6 screaming boys.

pshh pshh pshh
is all I really here
it's just so peacefull
that I may tear.





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kmarie14 said...
Nov. 6, 2010 at 6:02 pm
I actually really love wind :) I agree with Xclover the first two stanzas were a little much but I LOVED the last part ! awesome job!
 
Ryalynn replied...
Nov. 6, 2010 at 6:11 pm
this poem is kinda my least favorite
 
kmarie14 replied...
Nov. 22, 2010 at 9:33 pm
its not bad! i have definitly read worse ;) ha ha no really though I know how you feel there is plenty of peoms I look back and cant believe I wrote
 
Ryalynn replied...
Nov. 23, 2010 at 3:38 pm
true true......this is iight
 
XCLover said...
Nov. 6, 2010 at 10:24 am

The first two stanzas seemed a little cheesy to me, more the first one than the second though. The last three were good :)

Where I live every now and then we get a massive wind storm and it is so breath taking to just go out into the storm and feel the wind.

 
Ryalynn replied...
Nov. 6, 2010 at 6:10 pm
i really dont even like this poem actually to tell you the truth
 
XCLover replied...
Nov. 7, 2010 at 11:48 am
That's the beauty of writing your own poetry, you can always go back and change it however you want it :)
 
Ryalynn replied...
Nov. 7, 2010 at 12:21 pm
true but even writng doesnt always make sense to me....i hate that when i look back at it, it doesnt sound right or like me
 
XCLover replied...
Nov. 7, 2010 at 10:17 pm
yeah...that's where the ability to change it is nice
 
Ryalynn replied...
Nov. 8, 2010 at 10:13 am
i confused
 
XCLover replied...
Nov. 8, 2010 at 11:20 am
If you look back at your writing and don't like it, then you can change it cause you're the one who wrote it :)
 
Ryalynn replied...
Nov. 8, 2010 at 3:29 pm
true true so true
 
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