sigh*

October 18, 2010
A sigh paints his picture in my mind
A portrait of beauty
One of a kind
It’s the thing that you see and
gasp.
In delight of pure misery
Yet my love will last.
But then like a wave crashing
Cold against the shore
Knocking down sandcastles unwelcomed
At their door,
The love is gone
You have taken it away.
With you has come change
Unwelcomed by pain





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Aderes18 said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 9:13 pm

I really enjoy this poem :) 

This is the way I feel about someone right now, it captures it perfectly.

This poem doesn't feel like it's about a sigh, it seems like it's about something far more deeper than a sigh. 

 
XCLover said...
Nov. 7, 2010 at 11:59 am

hmmm, very interesting. i was a little confused, did you love personA and then meet personB who made you forget personA but then person B ended up hurting you? or was personA the one who hurt you?

 

other than that, I really like it :) especially the lines about the wave crashing on the beach knocking down the sandcastles

 
kmarie14 replied...
Nov. 7, 2010 at 12:43 pm

just about one person actually :P and thanks I am glad you like it

 

 

 

 
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Nov. 6, 2010 at 10:33 am

This is rather interesting, it has some really good lines, I especially like "In delight of pure misery".

You're good :)

Thank you for posting.

 
kmarie14 replied...
Nov. 6, 2010 at 5:52 pm
thanks you!!!!!! (:
 
CameandgonesmartyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 4:46 pm

LOVE LOVE IT!

SO  LOVE LOVE LOVE Love l

 
kmarie14 replied...
Nov. 5, 2010 at 9:59 pm
Thanks a ton!!! :) i am glad you loved it(:
 
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