Unfinished Love Confession This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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Heart thumps
thudding with purpose
beating like a drum
through my rib cage
making my vision blur
my world is tilting
all because of three little words
“I love you.”
Focusing intently
on the simple task
of breathing

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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Navi-Talmid-Shel-Seraphim said...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 6:14 pm
This is such a good poem. :)
 
BoosflashThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 19, 2010 at 1:02 pm
you get that?"of breathing"-the simple task-"of breathing". good one!
 
mimibby said...
Mar. 28, 2010 at 4:17 pm
i love it
 
a B. said...
Jul. 31, 2009 at 1:17 am
Good One!
 
Tayler H. said...
May 13, 2009 at 6:37 pm
WOW THAT WAS REALLY GOOD AND SO TRUE
 
<3::wish4wings::<3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 17, 2009 at 1:54 pm
this is so sweet:)
""focusing on the simple task of breathing""
i like it alot
 
Blossom said...
Jan. 2, 2009 at 7:14 am
This poem is so sweet and yet funny because I can just imagine a cartoon character being in a blur with the phrsase "I love you" surrounding him/her until him/her falls from exhaustment of trying to breathe and stand all at once. Great job and write on Bubbles!
 
Cookiemonstar said...
Dec. 15, 2008 at 3:14 pm
This poem is good granted. It reprents those sweet little feelings we all desire. But is it really love? Love comes day by day, you can never know if it is true. You can't know if their love is the same as yours, so as your heart thumps and you are short of breath remember not to put too much hope on those 3 little words... becayse they might not be true.
 
Mr said...
Nov. 26, 2008 at 7:11 pm
I really love this! it reminds me of how i felt when my boo said those three words to me.
 
milkyway said...
Nov. 21, 2008 at 8:38 pm
this is A PRETTY GOOD POET I REALLY LOVE IT
 
miriana1 said...
Nov. 20, 2008 at 3:38 am
this piece is absolutely amazing lovely job!
 
Poewannabe said...
Nov. 20, 2008 at 12:09 am
i really loved it i actually that feeling not to long ago and could not figure out how to word it so thanx
 
kdhg said...
Nov. 19, 2008 at 6:41 pm
its not very good, im sorry, but its really bad.
 
tweedle dee said...
Nov. 19, 2008 at 1:09 pm
love it! great job!!!
 
Dani** said...
Oct. 2, 2008 at 12:43 am
i really love this poem it reminds me of a past relationship....
GOOD JOB!!!
 
littlemelover said...
Sept. 17, 2008 at 5:38 pm
i am totally speechless i was the same way i love it!!!
 
Brandy_XoxO said...
Sept. 19, 2008 at 5:30 pm
I love it! especially the last part its really cute<3
 
<3myluvsong182 said...
Sept. 14, 2008 at 4:46 pm
omg, totally speechless...maximum awesomness!!! I'm
 
jensr2005 said...
Sept. 7, 2008 at 12:01 am
love it very well done
 
funny bunny said...
Sept. 3, 2008 at 7:15 pm
it is a very cute poem
 
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