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October 13, 2010
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Hands of time always turning
Hearts of the abandoned always yearning
People always moving
Minds always rushing
When you are alone
You know it
You feel it
Time slips away
It's the same every day.
Until finally
An angel comes

With the glowing aura
Of a newborn star
It whispers your name
Calling out to you
With tears in your eyes
You embrace the angel
and all you can say is

"Thank you...
...for saving me"





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Dragonscribe said...
Oct. 28, 2010 at 8:02 pm
This is a beautful, masterful poem. Even though you haven't really described what's around you in this poem, the words you choose make me see a clear picture as I read it. The only thing I would suggest is that the sencond line is a little too long - it doesn't flow as well. I think it's the word "abandoned" that does it. Of course it's your opinion, but I would tweak it a bit. Excellent poem!
 
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Oct. 28, 2010 at 8:03 pm
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