savior ..

October 13, 2010
By puckett29 SILVER, Arrington, Tennessee
puckett29 SILVER, Arrington, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
what if im not the superhero what if im the villein


Hands of time always turning
Hearts of the abandoned always yearning
People always moving
Minds always rushing
When you are alone
You know it
You feel it
Time slips away
It's the same every day.
Until finally
An angel comes

With the glowing aura
Of a newborn star
It whispers your name
Calling out to you
With tears in your eyes
You embrace the angel
and all you can say is

"Thank you...
...for saving me"



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on Oct. 28 2010 at 8:03 pm
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"

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on Oct. 28 2010 at 8:02 pm
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"

This is a beautful, masterful poem. Even though you haven't really described what's around you in this poem, the words you choose make me see a clear picture as I read it. The only thing I would suggest is that the sencond line is a little too long - it doesn't flow as well. I think it's the word "abandoned" that does it. Of course it's your opinion, but I would tweak it a bit. Excellent poem!


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