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The Girl Watches

October 7, 2010
By Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
8 articles 2 photos 513 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live for today, not for tomorrow


The girl watches.
People laughing and enjoying themselves.
She knows what they think, these people who talk.
They think she is invisible, unnoticed by all.
But I know what they think, these people who talk and I will make sure she has her say.
One day, I will find a way for her to have her say.


The author's comments:
I was watching one of the quiet girls in my English class and wondered what it would be like not being able to talk, but still wanting to communicate. I was curious about they were thinking and this is the result.

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on Aug. 3 2011 at 8:17 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

I like the imagery in your poem.  It's nice, simple and tells a story.  Great work! :)

on Jul. 21 2011 at 6:09 pm
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

I like it! :) It's very pretty and simple. Well done!

on May. 28 2011 at 6:57 pm
Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
8 articles 2 photos 513 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live for today, not for tomorrow

Thanks so much guys! :) I really, really appreciate the feedback!

on Apr. 5 2011 at 10:59 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

awwwww, i love this, it has like, its own other story to it. so sweet :))

Jubilex SILVER said...
on Mar. 4 2011 at 6:21 pm
Jubilex SILVER, Adelaide, Other
7 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I think that if I ever have kids, and they are upset, I won't tell them people are starving in China or anything like that because it won't change the fact that they were upset. And even if someone has it much worse, that doesn't really change the fact that you have what you have. Good and bad."
- The Perks of Being a Wallflower, by Stephen Chbosky

I'm not sure why it repeated my comment =S

Jubilex SILVER said...
on Mar. 4 2011 at 6:20 pm
Jubilex SILVER, Adelaide, Other
7 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I think that if I ever have kids, and they are upset, I won't tell them people are starving in China or anything like that because it won't change the fact that they were upset. And even if someone has it much worse, that doesn't really change the fact that you have what you have. Good and bad."
- The Perks of Being a Wallflower, by Stephen Chbosky

This is quite clever and I do enjoy the ideas and writing.

 

Just a little constructive feedback, all with structure. If you seperate the "these people who talk" lines, so instead of using a comma, you give them their own lines, I think the poem would flow better. And a little more spacing in some of the others might sound a little nicer. It's a matter of preference exactly how it's done, so don't just take the way I do it, if you'd like something better. I'd probably space it like this:

 

The girl watches.

People laughing and enjoying themselves.

She knows what they think,

These people who talk.

They think she is invisible,

Unnoticed by all.

But I know what they think,

These people who talk

And I will make sure she has her say.

One day, I will find a way

For her to have her say.

 

What do you think?


on Jan. 30 2011 at 3:31 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A guy walks up to me and asks 'What's Punk?'. So I kick over a garbage can and say 'That's punk!'. So he kicks over a garbage can and says 'That's Punk'?, and I say 'No that's trendy'!"- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

I'm generally on the louder and charismatic side, though I am inexplicably drawn to quieter people.

I liked the poem, it was short and sweet.


Lacer GOLD said...
on Jan. 11 2011 at 2:54 pm
Lacer GOLD, Highland Village, Texas
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The thing about philosophy is that it often runs dry when thought of so shallowly.

This is an amazing piece with extreme relvance to today. I have a very large appreciation for deep interpretation and poetry, and I love the piece and what it proposes people to do. Less is more :)

Coffee BRONZE said...
on Jan. 8 2011 at 12:49 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

exactly. I used to be just like that. I'm a little more outgoing now, but still

anyway, i thoguht it was great, really.


on Jan. 7 2011 at 3:39 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

I liked it and I had a girl in my class who did the exact same thing (she just watched us and never said anything) this poem is kind of what I feel aswel so I relate to it very much!! Well done!!

on Dec. 5 2010 at 6:07 pm
amandap PLATINUM, Midlothian, Virginia
31 articles 0 photos 183 comments
aaahh :) I enjoyed this. You say so much with so little, and it is quite relatable! good job :)

on Nov. 13 2010 at 9:26 pm
echome94 PLATINUM, Daleville, Virginia
32 articles 3 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
When the world around me ceases to exist and then i will open up and let a cruel man like you in


~Unknown~

It isnt fun being the quiet girl, you want to speak but never find your voice for fear of being picked on.

AshTree SILVER said...
on Nov. 13 2010 at 11:06 am
AshTree SILVER, Clarksville, Tennessee
7 articles 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Live your art" -made this one up myself. Simple, but true.

I like this. I've never really been the quiet person and it makes me wonder what I would be like if I was. Go you! *gives a gigantic smile* :D

Atrissa BRONZE said...
on Oct. 27 2010 at 5:25 pm
Atrissa BRONZE, Akron, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
With everything falling down around me, I'd like to believe in all the possibilities.

no, i like it. it shows someone cares about her :)

on Oct. 27 2010 at 12:39 am
Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
8 articles 2 photos 513 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live for today, not for tomorrow

Thanks so much! :) I wasn't sure how the last 2 lines would come out or whether they would stuff up the entire poem!!

Atrissa BRONZE said...
on Oct. 26 2010 at 2:58 pm
Atrissa BRONZE, Akron, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
With everything falling down around me, I'd like to believe in all the possibilities.

this is really cool. i like how u wrote it from an unknown persons point of view :)


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