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Fears Fall

October 6, 2010
By SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"


Silently fall the tears.
Though silent,
encompasses all her fears.
All her fears
fall down her face,
Knows she takes up too much space.
In the little white room,
gives herself a hug
and is led to her doom.
Hooked up to wires,
tells herself to be strong.
she knows strength requires
that she admits she’s done wrong.
Silently fall the fears.
Though silent,
encompasses all her tears.



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Beila BRONZE said...
on Mar. 23 2015 at 9:54 pm
Beila BRONZE, Palo Alto, California
3 articles 0 photos 516 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The coldest winter I ever spent was a summer in San Francisco." -Mark Twain

I like your play on words between tears and fears. It makes me think of all the ways they are the same. Crying seems so vulnerable to us perhaps because it exposes the very fact that we do have fears. This poem is a fascinating glimpse into a unique personal situation through the commonly relatable experience of tears.

KylieK GOLD said...
on May. 4 2012 at 11:33 am
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
11 articles 0 photos 270 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

I'm pleasantly surprised! And why don't you have a piece in the magazine? I don't see why this isn't published! It has a very clever rythm, and the rhymes are fresh! Very original!

juscziwto said...
on Mar. 14 2011 at 10:38 am
juscziwto, Farmingtion, Minnesota
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Descriping my Breakdown again

on Mar. 6 2011 at 11:02 am
CWells_521 DIAMOND, Greene, New York
81 articles 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
The best things in life are unseen, that's why you close your eyes when you kiss, cry, or dream.
What doesn't kill you, only makes you stronger.

I really love this, it gives me a different meaning than it might to other people but it's so real. Great job!

on Feb. 19 2011 at 5:00 am
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

If that's your interpretation of it. (Sorry to sound like an English teacher. I know what I'm describing, but what you think I'm describing is what you think and I'm not going to tell you what to think.)

on Feb. 19 2011 at 4:58 am
the_sparrow SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

Am I right in saying that you are describing a person on death row headed to the electric chair?

on Nov. 20 2010 at 6:03 pm
FritiaSalsus BRONZE, Lakeville, Minnesota
3 articles 3 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Absolutely maybe.

Ooh! i loved the flow of this. I found it sad, but it was very honest. I loved the feeling you put into this, and am going to go look at the rest of your work.

on Nov. 2 2010 at 11:00 am
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
13 articles 0 photos 531 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't believe in hell but I believe in my parent's couch-- Watsky

I liked how you related the ending back to the beginning, it made the poem actually sound like it was over, and the reader was left very satisfied.  Pretty sad, but very forefilling and honest.  I also liked your metaohor and your vocabulary.  Nice job, 5 stars :)

on Oct. 25 2010 at 10:17 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

What do you mean by that?

minnieokie said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 10:03 pm
Very good!  I think I have an advantage when reading your work.