The Fake World

September 30, 2010
Life seems joyful
Life is bright
Such a beauty is a sight
Hearts glow
Lips smile
Clenched hands swing to and fro
The sun is beaming
The streams are running
The wind is singing
Life is full
The brim just barely reached
Life in all its essences
Memories of past
Of present
The out look of the future
Every soul is open
Is free
What a sight to see
The laugehter
The love
Every kiss
Every hug
Smiles all around
All of this without a sound
Its a fantacy
One everyone wants
All are inocent thoughts
The real life is gone
The other world
Its all in song
All sing and sing
Till all grow tired and sleep
Only to wake and sing
Life seems joyful
Life is bright
This fake world is quite a sight





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XxDream_in_ColorxX said...
Mar. 6, 2011 at 3:23 pm

I really like this poem, though I saw a few grammar and spelling errors.  (And just in case you wanted them pointed out to make it easier for you...)

Out look should be one word- Outlook  Laugehter- should be laughter  Fantacy- should be fantasy  Inocent- innocent

Five stars though.  =]  Keep writing!

 
TwinDemons replied...
Mar. 6, 2011 at 5:10 pm
lol I am horrible at spelling, thank for help ^.^*
 
XxDream_in_ColorxX replied...
Mar. 6, 2011 at 9:38 pm
Anytime!  C=
 
Raytheraym said...
Mar. 6, 2011 at 2:26 pm
I like it! Nice concept. I really like the last lines. I did see quite a few grammar/spelling mistakes though. But, still good.
 
TwinDemons replied...
Mar. 6, 2011 at 2:36 pm
Thank you!!!!!!! O.O finally someone comments!!!!!!
 
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