What Does She Feel?

September 26, 2010
By Angel1932 PLATINUM, Antioch, California
Angel1932 PLATINUM, Antioch, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Love can touch us one time and last for a lifetime" ~ Celine Dion
"If you're going to pray don't worry... if you're going to worry don't pray." ~ Mariah Carey


She is the party of the group
she makes you laugh with her favorite line
she says yes when she really means no
she gives her heart to you always

she listens to your stories,ups&downs
but who listens to her
she tries her best to stay positive but her past wont let her.

All day she is laughing, but at night the past comes to haunt her and sometimes
i have to cry at night.



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Zoya_Khan GOLD said...
on Dec. 23 2012 at 3:23 am
Zoya_Khan GOLD, Gujranwala, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Where LOGIC ends, FAITH begins.
- Zoya Khan

Nice :) :) :)

on Aug. 29 2011 at 7:42 pm
Angel1932 PLATINUM, Antioch, California
33 articles 0 photos 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love can touch us one time and last for a lifetime" ~ Celine Dion
"If you're going to pray don't worry... if you're going to worry don't pray." ~ Mariah Carey

Thanx... and thank you for the advice :)

on Aug. 28 2011 at 5:26 pm
snaomi PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
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I really really like the end of this poem. The change of narrator at the end is great. I feel like the beginning could be tightened a bit to reflect the end. Maybe search for stronger verbs at the beginning to help propel the poem




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