Faces Fall

September 24, 2010
I watch as he walks, smiling in my direction,
My face lights up, he has remembered me at last,
I watch his eyes focus, but on something over my shoulder,
My face falls, he is still hers,
I watch him walk, into her embrace away from my own.

I watch as he opens his phone, grinning wide,
Glancing I see him text away, faster and faster,
I watch as her phone is opened, same time as my own,
My phone’s screen holds a simple ‘k,' she giggles loudly at her own,
I watch their fingers dance, in a world I’m not welcome.

I watch as they twirl and whirl, a battle of wills,
They yell and shout, and finally...silence,
I watch as his face turns to my own, hopeful,
Finally...fully focused on his best friend,
I watch as he recognizes me, the one who loves him.

I do not watch as his face falls when he sees me,
Smiling into your eyes, content in your arms,
I do not watch him walk away, face to the floor,
Tears leak slowly, much like the pain I have felt,
I do not watch his pain absorb him, his face has fallen.

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KyotoLove said...
Apr. 25, 2011 at 11:56 am
wow. just wow. my vocabulary hit awall. first wordthat poppedinto mind was WOW. GOOD JOB!!!(:
elmosoreo replied...
Apr. 25, 2011 at 1:01 pm
Thanks :) it's by far my favorite that I've written
Beachgirl1 said...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 10:50 am
This is amazing! It is well-written, it flows and it is great! Brave! I love it!
tangem This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 7, 2011 at 10:56 pm
Wow, great job! This totally describes me!! Haha :)
elmosoreo replied...
Mar. 8, 2011 at 7:58 am
Thanks :) Me too
hold.me.still..899 said...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 9:53 am
awesome work!! i liked how this told a story :) it turned out pretty meaningful in my opinion
elmosoreo replied...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 11:01 am
The best poems come from life experiences...
steelersbabe said...
Oct. 7, 2010 at 1:07 am
Wow.... this is really good.  I would love to read more of your work in media. 
elmosoreo replied...
Oct. 7, 2010 at 9:14 am
Thanks :) I'll let you :) haha I'll text ya lata
apocalyptigirl said...
Oct. 5, 2010 at 1:40 pm
Revenge? :( Anyway, I liked this, don't have any real critiques. Actually wait. The only thing was that I didn't figure out the bf and the gf had broken up in the 3rd stanza until i read it again. but that's just me being dense i suppose. I liked the little details you put in about teen life, like the texting and such. :)
Killer_PianoForteist replied...
Oct. 5, 2010 at 1:46 pm
This is very good and very sad, kind of like Poe but less sad. I like it alot, though. Its very deep, and you used excellent vocabulary. Keep up the good work, I can't wait until write and post more poems! Good job! :D
elmosoreo replied...
Oct. 5, 2010 at 7:03 pm

Not really revenge...It is life...people go on. and im not sure it is a breakup either to be honest...


and thanks :) I have some on the forums if you wanna read a few more of mine.

DaughterofEvil replied...
Mar. 15, 2011 at 4:58 pm
That was quite good. I wouldn't say it's like Poe because Poe was much darker....(as am I 70% of the time.) but anyways, you did a fantastic job, and I look forward to reading more! 5/5 from me! And I'm truly sorry that this happened to you...
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