Faces Fall

September 24, 2010
By elmosoreo SILVER, Paducah, Kentucky
elmosoreo SILVER, Paducah, Kentucky
8 articles 2 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Oftentimes we say goodbye to the person we love without wanting to. Though that doesn’t mean that we've stopped loving them or we've stopped to care. Sometimes goodbye is a painful way to say I love you....


I watch as he walks, smiling in my direction,
My face lights up, he has remembered me at last,
I watch his eyes focus, but on something over my shoulder,
My face falls, he is still hers,
I watch him walk, into her embrace away from my own.

I watch as he opens his phone, grinning wide,
Glancing I see him text away, faster and faster,
I watch as her phone is opened, same time as my own,
My phone’s screen holds a simple ‘k,' she giggles loudly at her own,
I watch their fingers dance, in a world I’m not welcome.

I watch as they twirl and whirl, a battle of wills,
They yell and shout, and finally...silence,
I watch as his face turns to my own, hopeful,
Finally...fully focused on his best friend,
I watch as he recognizes me, the one who loves him.

I do not watch as his face falls when he sees me,
Smiling into your eyes, content in your arms,
I do not watch him walk away, face to the floor,
Tears leak slowly, much like the pain I have felt,
I do not watch his pain absorb him, his face has fallen.


The author's comments:
Teen life...Woot...

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on Apr. 25 2011 at 1:01 pm
elmosoreo SILVER, Paducah, Kentucky
8 articles 2 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Oftentimes we say goodbye to the person we love without wanting to. Though that doesn’t mean that we've stopped loving them or we've stopped to care. Sometimes goodbye is a painful way to say I love you....

Thanks :) it's by far my favorite that I've written

on Apr. 25 2011 at 11:56 am
ofpaintedroses GOLD, Berne, Indiana
12 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
"How long is forever?"
"Sometimes just one second."

wow. just wow. my vocabulary hit awall. first wordthat poppedinto mind was WOW. GOOD JOB!!!(:

on Apr. 13 2011 at 10:50 am
Beachgirl1 PLATINUM, Bellevue, Washington
32 articles 4 photos 178 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If You Don't Fight Back, You've Already Lost."
"Don't suppress Laughter, it goes to your thighs."

This is amazing! It is well-written, it flows and it is great! Brave! I love it!

on Mar. 15 2011 at 4:58 pm
That was quite good. I wouldn't say it's like Poe because Poe was much darker....(as am I 70% of the time.) but anyways, you did a fantastic job, and I look forward to reading more! 5/5 from me! And I'm truly sorry that this happened to you...

on Mar. 8 2011 at 7:58 am
elmosoreo SILVER, Paducah, Kentucky
8 articles 2 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Oftentimes we say goodbye to the person we love without wanting to. Though that doesn’t mean that we've stopped loving them or we've stopped to care. Sometimes goodbye is a painful way to say I love you....

Thanks :) Me too

on Mar. 7 2011 at 10:56 pm
TanGem PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
34 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is not a feeling; it is a gift, an act, an ultimate sacrifice. -Me (Em)

Wow, great job! This totally describes me!! Haha :)

on Oct. 8 2010 at 11:01 am
elmosoreo SILVER, Paducah, Kentucky
8 articles 2 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Oftentimes we say goodbye to the person we love without wanting to. Though that doesn’t mean that we've stopped loving them or we've stopped to care. Sometimes goodbye is a painful way to say I love you....

The best poems come from life experiences...

on Oct. 8 2010 at 9:53 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

awesome work!! i liked how this told a story :) it turned out pretty meaningful in my opinion

on Oct. 7 2010 at 9:14 am
elmosoreo SILVER, Paducah, Kentucky
8 articles 2 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Oftentimes we say goodbye to the person we love without wanting to. Though that doesn’t mean that we've stopped loving them or we've stopped to care. Sometimes goodbye is a painful way to say I love you....

Thanks :) I'll let you :) haha I'll text ya lata

on Oct. 7 2010 at 1:07 am
steelersbabe BRONZE, West Paducah, Kentucky
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what your gonna get

Wow.... this is really good.  I would love to read more of your work in media. 

on Oct. 5 2010 at 7:03 pm
elmosoreo SILVER, Paducah, Kentucky
8 articles 2 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Oftentimes we say goodbye to the person we love without wanting to. Though that doesn’t mean that we've stopped loving them or we've stopped to care. Sometimes goodbye is a painful way to say I love you....

Not really revenge...It is life...people go on. and im not sure it is a breakup either to be honest...

 

and thanks :) I have some on the forums if you wanna read a few more of mine.


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on Oct. 5 2010 at 1:46 pm
Birder SILVER, Waterboro, Maine
6 articles 22 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you, unless they do unto you first, then open a can of unto on to them."

"Obey the ninja."

"What's that? And why does it say snickle tickle?"

This is very good and very sad, kind of like Poe but less sad. I like it alot, though. Its very deep, and you used excellent vocabulary. Keep up the good work, I can't wait until write and post more poems! Good job! :D

on Oct. 5 2010 at 1:40 pm
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
4 articles 2 photos 285 comments

Favorite Quote:
"DON'T PANIC." ~from The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams

Revenge? :( Anyway, I liked this, don't have any real critiques. Actually wait. The only thing was that I didn't figure out the bf and the gf had broken up in the 3rd stanza until i read it again. but that's just me being dense i suppose. I liked the little details you put in about teen life, like the texting and such. :)




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