Needles

Needles
No doubts cross me when I pull on my jacket
The cold air around me
Is vapor ice
And it sits on my skin.
I beg it to melt
But it wants to win against my pleads
So I trap you now
Beneath the soft cotton that covers my arms
and soon my head.
This smug little world is an illusion
Because the heat and darkness
I create.

My fingers caress
The end of my sleeve
And hit the air
that cold, wretched air that wants to kill.
But before I can hide it again
The shivers are spreading
Up my arm and along my spine
But I ignore that urge to squirm
And let it pass
Like bolts of electricity
That I subdue.
My hand is pulled back in
To my darkened haven
And I don’t ever want to let it go out there again.
Out there where
There are needles
In the air.





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through_my_eyes said...
Oct. 7, 2010 at 3:37 pm
I like this. You used something your very good at. (Manifesting the imagry) and used it to capture what your character was thinking within a moment :)
 
CoLdEsTNiGhTs replied...
Oct. 7, 2010 at 6:37 pm
thank you! i just love turning little things into images. like here, its sticking your hand into the cold and i have another about walking down a hallway!
 
through_my_eyes replied...
Oct. 7, 2010 at 8:05 pm

haha wicked!

Its the little things that make life big ;)

 
CoLdEsTNiGhTs replied...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 3:25 pm
in agreement ;0
 
thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 2:07 pm

i really like this poem! i love the way you ended it: "there are needles, in the air." so powerful. it made me want more!

check out some of my work, too if you'd like. keep writing!

 
CoLdEsTNiGhTs replied...
Oct. 4, 2010 at 4:17 pm

thank you!!! i really got the idea for this poem from the cold weather, and also the way that im afraid to open up to people. ill read some of your stuff!

 

 
maggiebar1 replied...
Oct. 4, 2010 at 6:57 pm
i liked it a lot...ur imagery is awesome!
 
CoLdEsTNiGhTs replied...
Oct. 7, 2010 at 6:38 pm
thanks! i saw that u read a lot of my stuff. thanks so much!!!
 
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