Alone

September 17, 2010
By ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
30 articles 2 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.


When people look at her, she smiles
Teeth flashing
Eyes aglow
They smile back
Because to them
Her true emotions show

Hair framing her face
Highlighting her eyes
Her cheeks
Her clothes casual
Posture strong
Never weak

Then people turn away
They’re satisfied
No one sees
She knows they don’t
Her happy smile falters
As does the strength in her knees

Her eyes glaze over
With things unshed
Mostly tears
Unshed to stay strong
To stay hidden
Hiding her fears

Everyone thinks they know her
All her likes
Her wants and needs
They think they know why
She usually doesn’t cry
Doesn’t plead
Why she smiles, why she laughs
When she sees something funny
Hears a good joke
Why she does what she does
Her sports, her passions
Why she doesn’t choke

They think they know her loves
Who she crushes on
At any time
They think they understand
What she writes
What she rhymes
What she feels during the night
In the dark
Alone
Whether at a friend’s
At a camp
At home

They think they know her
Her favorite book
Her favorite song
They think they know her
All about her
They’re wrong

She’s okay with that
Hiding behind the words
“I’m fine”
Yet she wants someone to see her
Meet her gaze with two words
“Don’t lie”

It never seems to happen
Crushing her goals
Her dreams
She continues to play along
She’s happy
So it seems

Silently crying out for help
From someone
Something
People look back her way, and
As if one thing bothers her
Nothing
She let’s herself seem happy
Yet it’s fake, breaking
Barely there
Everyone's gone, leaving her alone
To break down and cry
With no one to care


The author's comments:
It wasn't a good day for me, and here's the outcome.

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on Oct. 9 2010 at 8:10 pm
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
30 articles 2 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.

Why thank you angel =)

on Oct. 9 2010 at 7:38 pm
Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Live for today, not for tomorrow

Once again, brilliant! I can relate! I agrre with everyone else!

on Oct. 3 2010 at 8:11 pm
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
30 articles 2 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.

haha, k xD

on Oct. 3 2010 at 2:01 pm
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"DON'T PANIC." ~from The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams

I mean, I'm not saying to measure out your syllables or anything, just do them with what feels right. :)

on Oct. 3 2010 at 10:25 am
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
30 articles 2 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.

Thanks =) I wasn't really going for a certain number of syllables or anything, which is probably why it was off at places lol

on Oct. 2 2010 at 9:55 pm
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
4 articles 2 photos 285 comments

Favorite Quote:
"DON'T PANIC." ~from The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams

This was sad, and well-written. It painted a very good portrait of someone living behind a "happy face mask." At some points, the meter/rhythm was off, though: "Unshed to stay strong / To stay hidden" sounded odd to me, as did "At home"; I felt there should be another syllable there (like, "Or at home"). My favorite stanza was the one with the "I'm fine" and "Don't lie" in it. :)

on Sep. 29 2010 at 8:53 pm
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
30 articles 2 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.

That was one day more than a year ago that I just kinda...broke down. Then my best friend noticed the next day that I wasn't right, basically forced me to laugh and cheer up and call myself an idiot, and I was fine xD (she did it in a nice way, of course).

 

I hope you break free of your misunderstanding, and thanks for the feedback! =)


on Sep. 29 2010 at 6:02 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Oh dear, what a gradually saddening poem! It is a subtly tragic narrative of misunderstanding, and I am reminded of myself (if misunderstood for different reasons). I thank you for writing this, and if this is your story, I hope your break free. :)




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