Writing in my Room

August 28, 2010
By singing4ever GOLD, San Francisco, California
singing4ever GOLD, San Francisco, California
16 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Those who wish to sing always find a song." And, as a close second, "I have always imagined that Paradise will be some kind of library."

Brown golden curls piled on top of my pimpled forehead,
New hairbands making a rainbow of pastel colors digging into my wrists, forgotten and unused
Long nails clack-clack-clacking across the shiny black plastic squares.

The drums emanating out of the speakers beat out a steady rhythm that alternates and harmonizes with the clacking keys,
Green eyes watching the dark screen half a foot from my nose that reflects the sunlight on my tanned, tiny hands,
Neck aching, propped up by flattened useless blue pillows.

Hands rest on my flat chest while the green eyes roam around the room, searching,
My uneven teeth worrying the frayed, worn flesh inside my mouth,
The mess of a purple-painted room glaring at me, the floor invisible, t-shirts and jeans piled haphazardly everywhere.

Book titles stand out in bold reds and golds, drawing the eyes away from the bright paintings of suns that decorate the walls,
Sunlight spills from many recently-cleaned windows,
And the hands land on the plastic keys once more, clacking quietly against the powerful beats.

Clack, clack clack. Clacking for a while.

The author's comments:
How I always write.

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on Oct. 2 2010 at 4:21 pm
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.

This is...hmmm...um...disturbing in an undisturbing way and absolutely beautiful in an ugly way. If that makes any sense whatsoever. The picture is really weird...reminds me of Paranormal Activity (which isn't a bad thing lol). Anyway, I agree with star about the fingernail sounds and the emotion thing. Good work xD Keep writing!

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on Sep. 26 2010 at 8:03 am
starxoxo23 PLATINUM, New Hampshire, New Hampshire
21 articles 0 photos 97 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The creative is the place where no one else has ever been. You have to leave the city of your comfort and go into the wilderness of your intuition. What you'll discover will be wonderful. What you'll discover is yourself."
- Alan Alda

Three words: I LOVE this!!!

Writing about a very simple experience with this much emotion and elegant wording is something that takes talent. I like how this poem starts off by mentioning the sound your fingernails make when typing, and ends the same way.

I can only think of one suggestion - maybe try expressing to some extent how you're feeling and what you're thinking when you write.

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