Mark 4:12

August 15, 2010
By TanGem PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
TanGem PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
34 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is not a feeling; it is a gift, an act, an ultimate sacrifice. -Me (Em)


Chasing, striving.
She will not be satisfied
Lost and confused
She batters the doors
To what she thinks is love
Down the long hallway
She rushes, rushes
Not knowing, never knowing
That through each gate,
Underneath every archway
Is just another
Another another
Empty room.

My darling, my treasure,
I am forever behind you
Whispering your beauty
Singing my devotion
Crying out to your soul.
Oh, that you might turn and look to me!
That I might one day hold you in my arms.
But you are blind, my dearest,
You are blind.


The author's comments:
"'They may be ever seeing but never perceiving, and ever hearing but never understanding; otherwise they might turn and be forgiven!'" Mark 4:12.

Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 3 comments.


on Apr. 3 2011 at 4:03 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
42 articles 11 photos 333 comments
I love it! The repitition makes it much more powerful I think. I can clearly imagine this poem spoken aloud, the voice climbing or falling with each repitition. And I love how you named it after a passage in the bible. It shows you thought this poem out carefully.

leafy said...
on Apr. 2 2011 at 6:01 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

i like this poem, and on the contrary, i like the repitition. keep up the good work!

on Apr. 1 2011 at 10:54 pm
lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
40 articles 5 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live Life Like A Party That Never Ends

I like the message of this poem! However, I don't really like how you repeated some words. To me, repeating some of the words didn't make the poem flow right. You still did a nice job though, and the picture you chose to go along with it is perfect. Nice work :)


SciArc

MacMillan Books

Aspiring Writer? Take Our Online Course!