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I grab the pink eraser,
Start with my toes,
Go up to my ankles,
Continue to my legs,
Ascend to my torso,
It’s all gone,
Don’t worry, it’s all gone,
I move along to my left arm,
I’m right-handed,
Resume to my chest,
And my lifeless face,
Now I erase it all,
“For big mistakes,”
My eraser says.



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w4nderlust said...
Jan. 3, 2013 at 3:28 pm:
This hit a spark in me. I understand the view point because that was me once. I love your style. Bravo!
 
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mimirocks124 said...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 4:57 pm:
wow. this Ah-mazing. relly emotional under the eraser irony at the end. great job!
 
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Travelbaby12 said...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 8:22 pm:
This really is great. My friend pointed this site and especially this out to me. I loved it immediately. The others are right in saying that the wording is wonderfully put.
 
Anndie replied...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 11:39 am :
that's great, i'm really glad you liked this :D thank you
 
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Lilacs_Smell_Wonnerful This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 5:13 pm:

Really good! I think that the language and wording are perfect. I love the last two lines, they give the poem a whole deeper meaning.

-Lilac

 
Anndie replied...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 11:39 am :
thanks, i appreciate it :D
 
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Nicole93 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 1:52 pm:
<3 this. LOVE IT! i can relate to this a lot. its just... amazing wording
 
Anndie replied...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 11:40 am :
=D thank you
 
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nancyyy said...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 7:21 am:
Simple but powerful. The feeling of wishing you could just erase yourself and start over is well put.
 
Anndie replied...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 11:41 am :
simplicity is key, i suppose, thank you :)
 
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Hummingbird This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 6:16 pm:
And everytime I read it, it gives me something more. Something new. Thank you.
 
Anndie replied...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 6:41 pm :
thank you, i'm happy you think its a work of art
 
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Hummingbird This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 6:14 pm:
Wow- what clever writing. You really touched me with this. This really is a work of art. I like!
 
Hummingbird This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 7:36 pm :
I just joined teen ink, so I am just looking around, being inspired by other writers. You really have a gift. I am still waiting to see if teen ink will take any of my poems. Do you know how long it normally takes for them to contact you?
 
Anndie replied...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 8:49 pm :
sometimes it takes a week other times it takes three weeks it really does depend
 
Hummingbird This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 5:41 pm :
Thanks for letting me know, Anndie. Let me know when you publish anything else. Maybe if I ever get anything published you could read it. Thanks!
 
Anndie replied...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 6:20 pm :
for sure :D and just tell me when you have something up i'd love to read it :D
 
Hummingbird This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 6:53 pm :
Thank you so much, Anndie! I'm really glad I've connected with someone so soon. I can't wait to read more of your writing. I will keep you posted. Ttyl!
 
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