Obliterate

August 17, 2010
By Paty_Padilla BRONZE, Bloomington, California
Paty_Padilla BRONZE, Bloomington, California
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're desperate, that's when you got no choice."
-Donnie Brasco


I grab the pink eraser,
Start with my toes,
Go up to my ankles,
Continue to my legs,
Ascend to my torso,
It’s all gone,
Don’t worry, it’s all gone,
I move along to my left arm,
I’m right-handed,
Resume to my chest,
And my lifeless face,
Now I erase it all,
“For big mistakes,”
My eraser says.



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bxudoin BRONZE said...
on Jan. 3 2013 at 3:28 pm
bxudoin BRONZE, St. Martinville, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
I'm in love with places I've never been to and people I've never met.

This hit a spark in me. I understand the view point because that was me once. I love your style. Bravo!

on Sep. 9 2010 at 4:57 pm
meganwagner21 PLATINUM, Old Bridge, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes good things have to fall apart so better things can fall together." -Marilyn Monroe
"Nobody can go back and make a new beginning, but anyone can start today and make a new ending." -Maria Robinson

wow. this Ah-mazing. relly emotional under the eraser irony at the end. great job!

on Sep. 9 2010 at 11:41 am
Paty_Padilla BRONZE, Bloomington, California
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're desperate, that's when you got no choice."
-Donnie Brasco

simplicity is key, i suppose, thank you :)

on Sep. 9 2010 at 11:40 am
Paty_Padilla BRONZE, Bloomington, California
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're desperate, that's when you got no choice."
-Donnie Brasco

=D thank you

on Sep. 9 2010 at 11:39 am
Paty_Padilla BRONZE, Bloomington, California
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're desperate, that's when you got no choice."
-Donnie Brasco

thanks, i appreciate it :D

on Sep. 9 2010 at 11:39 am
Paty_Padilla BRONZE, Bloomington, California
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're desperate, that's when you got no choice."
-Donnie Brasco

that's great, i'm really glad you liked this :D thank you

Travelbaby12 said...
on Sep. 8 2010 at 8:22 pm
Travelbaby12, Mililani, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."
Oscar Wilde

This really is great. My friend pointed this site and especially this out to me. I loved it immediately. The others are right in saying that the wording is wonderfully put.

on Sep. 8 2010 at 6:53 pm
Hummingbird GOLD, Berryton, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
Life is either a daring adventure or nothing. -Helen Keller

Thank you so much, Anndie! I'm really glad I've connected with someone so soon. I can't wait to read more of your writing. I will keep you posted. Ttyl!

on Sep. 8 2010 at 6:20 pm
Paty_Padilla BRONZE, Bloomington, California
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're desperate, that's when you got no choice."
-Donnie Brasco

for sure :D and just tell me when you have something up i'd love to read it :D

on Sep. 8 2010 at 5:41 pm
Hummingbird GOLD, Berryton, Kansas
16 articles 0 photos 56 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is either a daring adventure or nothing. -Helen Keller

Thanks for letting me know, Anndie. Let me know when you publish anything else. Maybe if I ever get anything published you could read it. Thanks!

on Sep. 8 2010 at 5:13 pm
Lilacs_Smell_Wonnerful PLATINUM, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
40 articles 2 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons make grape juice. Then sit back and watch everyone look at you in amazement. :)

Really good! I think that the language and wording are perfect. I love the last two lines, they give the poem a whole deeper meaning.

-Lilac


on Sep. 8 2010 at 1:52 pm
Nicole93 PLATINUM, Mechanicsburg, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Sometimes the best two people to be together are the last two to realize it.

<3 this. LOVE IT! i can relate to this a lot. its just... amazing wording

nancyyy BRONZE said...
on Sep. 8 2010 at 7:21 am
nancyyy BRONZE, Spotsylvania, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The bigger the dreams, the smaller the competition"

Simple but powerful. The feeling of wishing you could just erase yourself and start over is well put.

on Sep. 7 2010 at 8:49 pm
Paty_Padilla BRONZE, Bloomington, California
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're desperate, that's when you got no choice."
-Donnie Brasco

sometimes it takes a week other times it takes three weeks it really does depend

on Sep. 7 2010 at 7:36 pm
Hummingbird GOLD, Berryton, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
Life is either a daring adventure or nothing. -Helen Keller

I just joined teen ink, so I am just looking around, being inspired by other writers. You really have a gift. I am still waiting to see if teen ink will take any of my poems. Do you know how long it normally takes for them to contact you?

on Sep. 7 2010 at 6:41 pm
Paty_Padilla BRONZE, Bloomington, California
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're desperate, that's when you got no choice."
-Donnie Brasco

thank you, i'm happy you think its a work of art

on Sep. 7 2010 at 6:16 pm
Hummingbird GOLD, Berryton, Kansas
16 articles 0 photos 56 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is either a daring adventure or nothing. -Helen Keller

And everytime I read it, it gives me something more. Something new. Thank you.

on Sep. 7 2010 at 6:14 pm
Hummingbird GOLD, Berryton, Kansas
16 articles 0 photos 56 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is either a daring adventure or nothing. -Helen Keller

Wow- what clever writing. You really touched me with this. This really is a work of art. I like!




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