Were Through

August 10, 2010
"You're the most amazing person I know."
But those words quickly disappeared When you jokingly said
"Were through."
Then everything became serious.
"You were kidding... right?"
I'd say hoping for a certain answer.
But for a while there was no response.
"Are we through like you said?"
"I dont want to put a title on it."
You'd say.
"You kinda have to."
I'd reply.
"Yea. We are I'm really sorry."
You'd say.
"Well, maybe you should be.
I'd say back still weeping.
" I cant wait for the heartbreak at the end of this."
You'd say.
"Good luck with yours. Mine already happened."
I'd reply.
All eyes are on me.
A hand is put on my shoulder.
I'd look up.
The person setting next to me had a compassionate look in his eye.
Then his phone would begin to ring.
He would answer.
He'd say.
It was him.
He would say
"Is she crying?"
"Yea. She is and its all your fault."
My neighbor would say.
Then he would hang up.
A hug would be given,
And temporally a heart would be mended.

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ellyn-bo-bellyn_2014 said...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 12:03 pm
I like it but I was a little confused with all the I said You'd reply things. They just confused me a little. Great poem though! :P
olican16 replied...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 7:14 pm
thanks... i think
olican16 replied...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 7:14 pm
i was writing it like it was for him and that i was saying it to him...
ellyn-bo-bellyn_2014 replied...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 7:22 pm
I understand. It was just confusing. too many and you didn't really clarify too well I had to read it a couple times to get it.
syed954 said...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 8:34 pm
Another great poem!Another one of my poems, To an Innocent One, was just accepted today and it relates to this poem. This poem is flooded with great pathos. Keep up the good work! If you get the chance, comment and rate my other poem. 
olican16 replied...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 7:16 pm
ok... i will and thanks!!!
GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 3:04 pm
This is really relatable and flows really well. This is a hard thing to go through and you put that into words in a really well-written, powerful, emotional way. Great job, Keep writing~ <3
olican16 replied...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 4:11 pm

I wrote this when i was at grandmas house!! it seems like most of my poems come to me there!!


Thansk for all of your feedback!!

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