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Spending all your time wishing for the best,
Let me tell you something; it’s impossible.
Days wasting away as you hope and pray,
Yet no one and nothing is unstoppable.

Faith is strong as can, miming your beliefs.
You don’t need words to speak what silence can portray.
A plethora of undying love, but does it die with you?
Does it end with a last breath, on that very day?

Or does it live on in the air, in our breath, on the wind,
Blowing through the trees, through our souls and hearts and minds,
Dissipating as it moves, a trend towards disorder,
Fading, weakening as more hearts it binds?

Is it growing in our bones, our muscles and our blood,
Strengthened when we exercise, work our cardio?
Is it living in what we do, what we think and say,
Or see on the television, listen to on the radio?

Or as time goes by, is it murdered by its brother hate;
Its sister, a girl snapping at her best friend?
Is it eaten by the fire, by devils in disguise?
Can it survive forever? Can it last ‘til the end?

Can it face up to the cruelty, the fury, the pain?
Will it survive the violence? It seems impossible.
Yet it lives on in optimism, in a woman’s hope,
In the teenage belief, love is unstoppable.

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AsIAm This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 17, 2010 at 6:21 am

The Good: This has a great message, and a great beat.  Good job!

The Bad: Having undying and die in the same line could be changed.

The Random:  Love the last line!


CallMeFelix replied...
Sept. 17, 2010 at 2:14 pm
Thanks AsIAm =)
apocalyptigirl said...
Sept. 16, 2010 at 9:14 pm
I really liked this...good job! Deep poem, lol. That said, some of your word choices were, I thought, out-of-place. For instance, "work our cardio" to me doesn't fit with the serious tone of the rest of the poem; neither does the word "teenage." On a random rhythm side note, I'd make "til the end" "until the end"; I think the # of syllables sounds better. One line that wasn't clear in its meaning was "Faith is strong as can, miming your beliefs." I just didn't understand what you were saying the... (more »)
CallMeFelix replied...
Sept. 17, 2010 at 6:06 am
Shoot! It's supposed to be "Faith is strong as can be, miming your beliefs." Must've skipped that word. Thanks for the feedback =)
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