Slipping away

August 9, 2010
A taste of something sweet
Snatched from my mind.
but hazy.
A forgotten dream,
an epic fantasy my mind played
in my sleep.
like a small bite of
dark chocolate.
except for stinging bits and pieces-
upon the morn.
My dreams-
And My childhood-
are slipping away.

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shadowrider said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 11:02 pm
I loved this! The bit about dark chocolate made me hungry and really brought what you were saying to life in my mind. This was a great poem!
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Aug. 22, 2011 at 4:28 pm
Haha, thank you very much :) 
Aderes18 said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 2:05 pm
This is very beautiful. :)
Aderes18 replied...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 2:05 pm
I can also relate to this poem a lot. :)
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jun. 13, 2011 at 3:51 pm
Thank you very much :) I do believe that you are a stargirl, Aderes, in your own easily-relatable sort of way.
Thesilentraven This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 20, 2010 at 5:35 pm
Goodness, this is tragically beautiful. I love your metaphors and well chosen adjectives. Once again, you display intricate complexity veiled by simplicity. I love it. It was so sad, and I know the feeling.
IamtheStargirl replied...
Sept. 20, 2010 at 6:35 pm

I rather enjoyed writing this, so I am very glad that you enjoyed it :)

I love how you described it :D Your words are beautiful.

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