ghosts.

August 31, 2010
By rockc8 PLATINUM, Langley, Other
rockc8 PLATINUM, Langley, Other
24 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love all, trust few, do wrong to no-one" - William Shakespeare


footsteps echo through the empty halls
at least they would if the house wasn't so small
we walk around like friendly ghosts
at least until we come to blows

fake smiles and phony photographs
do absolutely nothing for me
so quit it with your fake laughs
i'm done with being your zombie

don't get so close, i think you know
that you don't want to be a parent now
you never tried, you only lied
it's kinda late to learn that now

keep telling me you've changed
you're done with playing games
like i've never heard that one before
i just don't need what you have in store

don't get so near, i think it's clear
that you're headed to a danger zone
don't hug me close, see how i froze
i'm just so used to being alone

i can't train myself to care
after the struggle of trying not to
when my whole life you weren't there
you can't teach yourself not to be you

so we walk around this house like ghosts
at least until we come to blows
footsteps echo in hypothetical halls
but no one's really there at all



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on Sep. 9 2010 at 10:45 am
SuicidalDreamer.. PLATINUM, Marshall, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Drop The World....." Or "Everything Happens For A Reason....." Or "I am jealous of every woman that has ever hugged him, Cause for that mere second. They held my entire world."

Wow....This is the best poem I have EVER read.....I can really relate to that and thats what makes it so great.....I love this and you should really keep writing.....

on Sep. 7 2010 at 8:41 pm
rockc8 PLATINUM, Langley, Other
24 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love all, trust few, do wrong to no-one" - William Shakespeare

Hey people, thanks sooo much for commenting and rating my work! Your feedback means the world to me, and please be sure to check out my other songs and poems, i add something new at the very least once per month. I'm still so excited at being rated #1 poem of the day earlier in the week, and having ten comments, well it's almost too much excitement for me to bear! Once again, thanks so much!

on Sep. 6 2010 at 10:42 pm
MirandaAdelyn SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
9 articles 1 photo 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I am very interested and fascinated how everyone loves each other, but no one really likes each other.”
― Stephen Chbosky, The Perks of Being a Wallflower

Great job, love the last part.

on Sep. 6 2010 at 8:52 pm
ClareBear07 GOLD, Glendale, Wisconsin
10 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't ever take a fence down until you know why it was put up. ~Robert Frost

Really powerful

krazyk GOLD said...
on Sep. 6 2010 at 5:41 pm
krazyk GOLD, Modesto, California
11 articles 5 photos 26 comments
amazing amazing job!! your rhyming and flow are quite amazing! keep up the great work! =].

on Sep. 6 2010 at 1:24 pm
mskullgirl GOLD, Waban, Massachusetts
14 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream -Edgar Allen Poe

This is awsome! I really like some of your rhymes!

on Sep. 6 2010 at 7:17 am
o.m.g thats a really nice poem hei...wish i worte it though..:)

on Sep. 4 2010 at 11:02 pm
xkissofcrimsono SILVER, Little Silver, New Jersey
5 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is no progress; like a crab on LSD, culture staggers endlessly sideways." -Rem Koolhaas

This is fantastic! The repetition of the ghosts walking in the halls gave a sense of people who knew each other but were entirely unfamiliar with one another. I think including punctuation to indicate breaks might add to the flow, but it has good rythm even without the indicative punctuation.

on Sep. 4 2010 at 10:05 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

I LOVE this poem. It has so much emotion. I love the last stanza. Your an absolute genius! Great job. ( :

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on Sep. 4 2010 at 7:42 pm
oriink BRONZE, Fredricksburg, Virginia
4 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you wanna' be, barbie girl."
-Barbie.

Beautiful written.

I felt like shining a flashlight on those ghosts so they could see themselves finally.


on Sep. 4 2010 at 4:33 pm
spiritualrevelationrevealspainandrevolution PLATINUM, Eugene, Oregon
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EASILY one of the best poems on the site

on Sep. 3 2010 at 3:15 pm
Lilacs_Smell_Wonnerful PLATINUM, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
40 articles 2 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons make grape juice. Then sit back and watch everyone look at you in amazement. :)

AMAZING! This is super-duper! I loved the confusion of feelings it evoked. Keep writing pleeeease. :)

-Lilac



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