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footsteps echo through the empty halls
at least they would if the house wasn't so small
we walk around like friendly ghosts
at least until we come to blows

fake smiles and phony photographs
do absolutely nothing for me
so quit it with your fake laughs
i'm done with being your zombie

don't get so close, i think you know
that you don't want to be a parent now
you never tried, you only lied
it's kinda late to learn that now

keep telling me you've changed
you're done with playing games
like i've never heard that one before
i just don't need what you have in store

don't get so near, i think it's clear
that you're headed to a danger zone
don't hug me close, see how i froze
i'm just so used to being alone

i can't train myself to care
after the struggle of trying not to
when my whole life you weren't there
you can't teach yourself not to be you

so we walk around this house like ghosts
at least until we come to blows
footsteps echo in hypothetical halls
but no one's really there at all

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xXDeadxSoulXx said...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 10:45 am
Wow....This is the best poem I have EVER read.....I can really relate to that and thats what makes it so great.....I love this and you should really keep writing.....
rockc8 said...
Sept. 7, 2010 at 8:41 pm
Hey people, thanks sooo much for commenting and rating my work! Your feedback means the world to me, and please be sure to check out my other songs and poems, i add something new at the very least once per month. I'm still so excited at being rated #1 poem of the day earlier in the week, and having ten comments, well it's almost too much excitement for me to bear! Once again, thanks so much!
MirandaAdelyn said...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 10:42 pm
Great job, love the last part.
ClareBear07 said...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 8:52 pm
Really powerful
krazyk said...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 5:41 pm
amazing amazing job!! your rhyming and flow are quite amazing! keep up the great work! =].
mskullgirl said...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 1:24 pm
This is awsome! I really like some of your rhymes!
Katt Crayford said...
Sept. 6, 2010 at 7:17 am
o.m.g thats a really nice poem hei...wish i worte it though..:)
xkissofcrimsono This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 4, 2010 at 11:02 pm
This is fantastic! The repetition of the ghosts walking in the halls gave a sense of people who knew each other but were entirely unfamiliar with one another. I think including punctuation to indicate breaks might add to the flow, but it has good rythm even without the indicative punctuation.
lostnhim said...
Sept. 4, 2010 at 10:05 pm
I LOVE this poem. It has so much emotion. I love the last stanza. Your an absolute genius! Great job. ( :
oriink said...
Sept. 4, 2010 at 7:42 pm

Beautiful written.

I felt like shining a flashlight on those ghosts so they could see themselves finally.

spiritualrevelationrevealspainandrevolution said...
Sept. 4, 2010 at 4:33 pm
EASILY one of the best poems on the site
Lilacs_Smell_Wonnerful This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 3, 2010 at 3:15 pm

AMAZING! This is super-duper! I loved the confusion of feelings it evoked. Keep writing pleeeease. :)


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