I Don't Like You But I Love You

August 6, 2010
By The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I will because I can, I can because I want to, I want to becasue you said I couldn't.


You stand
By my locker,
Blocking my way.
I turn,
Frightened,
That you'll see my blush.
Forgetting my feet,
I fall,
Slowly.
Time stops,
Silence takes over,
My world.
Suddenly,
Your laughter,
Breaks through the barrier.
I've hit the ground.
My books scatter,
across the floor,
And you stand,
By my locker,
Laughing.
Your friends,
make jokes
And you join in.
You jerk.
is the only thougt,
In my mind,
By I really hate myself.
For loving you.

Your friends


The author's comments:
True story,

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Lostinbooks said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 9:45 am
Lostinbooks, Arcadia, California
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Structurally, I like the way this poem is so consistent.  The commas at the end of every line aren't necessary, but in some ways give the poem a sort of...shattered continuity. 

"thougt" - typo!

It's that last line there, "I really hate myself.  For loving you." that is really powerful. 



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