My World

August 11, 2010
By The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
15 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I will because I can, I can because I want to, I want to becasue you said I couldn't.


In My World,
the grass is greener,
on my side.
There are,
enough worms,
for every bird.
In My World,
Everyone's,
a friend,
Nobody's
in need.
The mice
will play,
Whether the cat,
is here or not.
In My World.
Good things,
don't come to an end.
War,
is peaceful.
Rome,
wasn't built in a day
and neither,
was My World.


The author's comments:
It's supposeed to be filled with common sayings. Each one is a metaphor for something.

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on Sep. 9 2010 at 10:15 am
Beautiful_Roses SILVER, Temple, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Life is fragile so please don't throw anything at it.

oh. my grandfather died about 3 years ago. it was 7 days b4 my b-day and then the memorial service was 3 days later

on Sep. 5 2010 at 11:03 pm
The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
15 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I will because I can, I can because I want to, I want to becasue you said I couldn't.

Louis is really amazing. I dont really mind about my grandfather anymore though, he died like 8 years ago.

on Sep. 5 2010 at 8:13 am
Beautiful_Roses SILVER, Temple, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Life is fragile so please don't throw anything at it.

Im sorry about your grandfather. i wont sing any more because i used to sing with him. but  he inspired me to start writing and all my poems are dedicated to him

on Sep. 4 2010 at 10:56 pm
xkissofcrimsono SILVER, Little Silver, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"There is no progress; like a crab on LSD, culture staggers endlessly sideways." -Rem Koolhaas

I liked how almost blunt this seemed while incorporating those different sayings. It took a lot of cliches and put a twist on them. My only critique is be careful with punctuation, there seem to be a few extra commas that created an awkward pause when I was reading

on Sep. 4 2010 at 3:49 pm
The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
15 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I will because I can, I can because I want to, I want to becasue you said I couldn't.

I was actually listening to the Louis Armstrong song at the time. I opersonally, can't stand the song because it reminded me of  my grandfather. Then I realized that my world would have him, and this came.

on Sep. 3 2010 at 7:42 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

What a wonderful world! (No allusion to Louis Armstrong initially intended). It is a very cleverly written blend of popular sayings and your own person. Great job!

on Sep. 3 2010 at 8:45 am
Beautiful_Roses SILVER, Temple, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Life is fragile so please don't throw anything at it.

wow! that is really really good. what gave you the idea to right it

on Sep. 2 2010 at 9:18 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

yayy!! *claps :DDDD

that was awesomely amazingly brillliant!!! i loooved it!!!!!


on Sep. 1 2010 at 6:35 pm
Zazawish777 GOLD, KC, MO, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
life isn't passing me by, it's trying to run me over!

this is amazing. i love it. 5 out of 5 stars! please rate and comment on mine thanks!


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