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Trails in the Sky

August 4, 2010
By Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee


You are my world
But I'm blasting off into space.
Ready to explore the sky
Where I can leave a trace

Of myself and who I am,
What I have to offer and impart,
Though my trails will fade away
I'm ready to dart

All over that open blue
People look at each day
One of the few constants in life
When everything else starts to fray.

To let myself go
And catch peoples' eye
To reach that unreachable place
and somehow defy

The gravity
Thats holding me to this worn down street,
Anchoring me to the soil
Under my feet.

You may not be waiting
When I re-enter the atmosphere,
But I'm hoping that
When all the smoke clears

You'll see the sparks on the beach where I land
And come back this way.
Together again, your hand in mine,
We can watch someone else's trails fade to grey.


The author's comments:
My sister writes poetry too and is always talking about how she doesn't really THINK about and PLAN her poems like I do. So I decided to try writing one like she does. I just let it flow without tweaking it and heres the result! Lemme know what you think!

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on Sep. 10 2010 at 5:04 pm
poeticspirit12334 PLATINUM, Groesbeck, Texas
23 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Wearing a Christian T-shirt, and a cross necklace does NOT make you a Christian. , "For I know the plans I have for you," declares the Lord "They are plans to give you a hope and a future.'' Jeremiah 29:11

GREAT job again alex!! i love it all!!!!!!

on Sep. 7 2010 at 6:55 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thanks so much! :) Your comment means a lot! And sure, I'll definitely check you out!

aDreamer GOLD said...
on Sep. 6 2010 at 7:44 pm
aDreamer GOLD, Redondo Beach, California
13 articles 8 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
everyone is entitled to be stupid, but some abuse the privilege

the pursuit of happiness is a most ridiculous notion, if you pursue happiness you'll never find it

a hero is no braver than an ordinary man, but he is braver for 5 minutes longer

i think this is really amazing. i liked that you let it flow..i feel like we get a better sense of you. keep it up! :)

read some of mine? :)


on Aug. 31 2010 at 3:15 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

You're welcome. 

And yes, I have tried it, and it did not go so well. lol

:D


on Aug. 31 2010 at 2:49 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thank you! Have you tried it? Its really refreshing to not think so much about what you're writing! Anyway, thanks so much for the comment!!! :)

on Aug. 31 2010 at 11:31 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

It turned out pretty well even though you let it flow freely. If I don't think about a poem before I write it, the result would be...the lack of structure and it would sound amateur.

But this is so good. I'm impressed. Keep writing.!

<3:)