The One I Call Mine

August 22, 2010
By WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
32 articles 2 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not about success; it's about significance.

No one can make you feel inferior without your consent.


When I’m about to break, I run to you
When I’ve made a mistake, I confide in you

When I’m sick of the world, I let you know
When I’ve fallen apart, you make me whole

When I see your face, my heart skips a beat
When I’m in your embrace, I feel so complete

When I hear your voice, I lose my focus
Forget the other boys; you’re the only one I notice

When my days are dark, I look at you
When my nights are cold, I dream of you

When I hurt inside, you remove the pain
There’s just something about you that keeps me sane


When I dance with you, I’m filled with smite
When I’m kissing you, I know I’ve got it right

When I’m all alone, I think of you
When we’re on the phone, I laugh with you

When I want to cry, you wipe away my tears
When I’m afraid to try, you take away my fears

When I just can’t breathe, I long for you
When I feel so weak, I find strength in you

When you say my name, I feel so secure
I’m in love with you, babe; of this, I’m sure

When I’m close to you, the stars are aligned
You’re the greatest thing I’ve ever had to call mine


The author's comments:
I WAS writing this in honor of my one-year anniversary with my boyfriend, which would have been August 25th, 2010. Unfortunately, he broke up with me 6 days prior to. Despite my broken heart, I finished the poem, because he deserves some recognition for being so amazing to me.

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on Oct. 26 2010 at 12:04 pm
ShelbyLynn12 SILVER, Jackson, Ohio
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wow i absolutely love it. you're an amazing writer :)

on Oct. 1 2010 at 3:51 pm
MissFaber SILVER, Wayne, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Nothing Less.

Beautiful in its simplicity...

AJB97 said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 2:47 pm
AJB97, Nles, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Never be sad for wat is gone be glad it was once urs

Wow it was amazing just great

uhilu25 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 2:42 pm
uhilu25 BRONZE, Austin, Texas
3 articles 3 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
i am not bound to win,but i am bound to be true.i am not bound to succeed,but bound to live up to what light i have. -abraham lincon

awh thisis soo creative and beautiful:) read my stuff

 


on Aug. 26 2010 at 2:22 pm
WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
32 articles 2 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not about success; it's about significance.

No one can make you feel inferior without your consent.

Aw, thanks. :)

on Aug. 25 2010 at 7:51 pm
Valery5 PLATINUM, Riverside, California
21 articles 1 photo 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To be great is to be misunderstood."
"She's got the eyes of innocence, the face of an angel, a personality of a dreamer and a smile that hides more pain than you can ever imagine."
"What's bad for your heart is good for your art."

LOVE IT!!!! IT WAS AWSOME

on Aug. 25 2010 at 12:15 pm
jward24895 SILVER, Montour Falls, New York
5 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have noticed even people who claim everything is predestined, and that we can do nothing to change it, look before they cross the road.” -Stephen Hawking

This is a wonderful piece. I really like your writing style. :)

on Aug. 25 2010 at 11:23 am
SuicidalDreamer.. PLATINUM, Marshall, Illinois
31 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Drop The World....." Or "Everything Happens For A Reason....." Or "I am jealous of every woman that has ever hugged him, Cause for that mere second. They held my entire world."

I have to say this....You are very strong and really talented......You finished even though he left and that was a great thing to do and you made the feelings you had or still have into a beautiful peice of poetry....This is very great...Keep writing :)

on Aug. 25 2010 at 6:26 am
GetItOut BRONZE, Welland, Other
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quotations Form the beginning,
to the end,
My heart will beat for you.
And when it stops,
The pain will stop,
...The sorrow will stop,
The love will stop,
But the hurting will begin,

This is an amazing poem. I admire the fact that you finished it even in a time where it was probably the hardest. When i read it i felt like i knew exactly what you were feelings. Great poem :)

on Aug. 24 2010 at 7:57 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

I'm short on time, so I'll quickly say this: this is a very touching poem and I admire you for not feeling resentment toward you boyfriend for breaking up with you. It's very well written.




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