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You Smile

July 20, 2010
By Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee


You smile
At me,
Each step bringing you closer.

I think
To myself:
Remain calm 'til its over.

(But) Your smile
Is like
A cue for the butterflies.

Anxious hopes
all aflutter,
Driving into my sides.

You reach
The truck's window;
Make dark night bright as day.

We chat
About nothing
Til there's everything to say.

My nerve
Is fading,
Confidence slips away.

Too perfect
For me,
My plans start to fray.

But then.
You lean -
Looking as nervous as I feel.

So I lean
To the right -
When my lips touch yours, it all becomes real.

My fingers
On the nape of your neck
In your soft hair so black.

Your hand
Tightening comfortably
On my shoulder and back.

We pull
Ourselves apart,
And I wonder what you're thinking.

And you,
Of course,
Do the perfect thing.

My nerves
Rushing back -
but you make them disappear, when

You smile.


The author's comments:
This is about a kiss (OBVIOUSLY :P), that me and the guy had been so nervous about having. <3 It ended up being perfect. :)

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on Oct. 24 2010 at 12:40 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

:) Yes.  

on Oct. 24 2010 at 12:37 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

This is really good I can just picture it! Is this about the same guy in your Summer Lovin' ?

on Sep. 5 2010 at 2:37 pm
ellyncannon PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
29 articles 0 photos 204 comments

Favorite Quote:
That which we persist in doing becomes easier, not that the task itself has become easier, but that our ability to perform it has improved.
Ralph Waldo Emerson
<3

don't I know it!!! Haha

I love all your work! Keep it up! Get more stuff posted!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :P

xoxo!


on Sep. 3 2010 at 1:24 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

I'll admit, its not easy to write this amazingly :P Just kidding. But really, its not :P Thanks Elly! :))))

on Sep. 3 2010 at 1:23 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thanks! Your comment means a lot :)

on Aug. 30 2010 at 2:59 pm
ellyncannon PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
29 articles 0 photos 204 comments

Favorite Quote:
That which we persist in doing becomes easier, not that the task itself has become easier, but that our ability to perform it has improved.
Ralph Waldo Emerson
<3

wow.. I feel all in the loop on this one... It's great. flawless!! how do you write such amazing poetry???? :P

Olajide BRONZE said...
on Aug. 28 2010 at 9:37 pm
Olajide BRONZE, Lanham, Maryland
4 articles 0 photos 14 comments
this is really heartwarming. It is light, simple, and the word coice adds more to the beauty of te poem. Nice work

on Aug. 28 2010 at 12:44 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Yeah, I know what you mean :/ I've edited it since it got approval so it flows better, but thank you for the comment!

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 7:17 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

Hmm... the breakdown of the lines is very unusual. Some of the lines flow really well, while others could use some improvement. Overall, I like it.

on Aug. 25 2010 at 3:42 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thanks :) I've edited it since it was posted, and the rewrite flows better and isn't as forced :/Thanks for the comment!

on Aug. 24 2010 at 9:02 pm
chipsandguacamollie SILVER, Parker, Colorado
8 articles 4 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Knowledge is a polite word for dead but not buried imagination." - E. E. Cummings

When I started reading this, I didn't think I liked the choppy line breaks, but as I read further I started liking them more.  It's an interesting style, and the broken sentences add emphasis.  Some of the rhymes are a little forced, but I think it's originality and style is great.  Well done!

on Aug. 24 2010 at 8:02 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thanks so much...And it seems like my guy is getting away too :/ Anyway, your comment means a lot!

on Aug. 24 2010 at 7:44 pm
DaddyzUnwantedDolly PLATINUM, Raliegh, North Carolina
31 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened."~ Dr. Seuss

This reminds me of a past boyfriend I had that got away, I really liked this... My stuf is usually a tad gruesome- I like your way of interpretting the words.


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