Gone is the Angel

Set her free if you must
Let her go if you may
Stop holding her so tight
It just doesn't seem right
She grieving on the inside
But the pain is still trickling through
So loud is the music
Yet her screams can be heard
Those echoing shrieks
Shes holding the trigger so tight
The moment she pulls it shes free
A fast painful death
Yet the smile never fades away
As she watches her blood drain
As she waits for the light
To come and take her out of sight





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forget_me_not said...
Nov. 28, 2010 at 11:30 am
oh wow, amazing
 
forgottenangel replied...
Dec. 21, 2010 at 1:59 pm
Thank you!
 
thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 23, 2010 at 9:17 pm

VVVVV agreed! dont ever stop writing!i like how you wrote this from the third person point of view. it gives the reader a sort of perspective like looking from the outside, which is exactly the mood you were trying to create it seems.

check out some of my work if you'd like. great job on this! keep writing!(:

 
forgottenangel replied...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 12:25 pm
Thank you :)
 
amy404555555555 said...
Aug. 23, 2010 at 2:21 am
i love this poem, it really expresses you're true feeling's, dont stop writing ever
 
forgottenangel replied...
Aug. 23, 2010 at 6:34 pm
Thank you :)
 
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