The Masquerade

June 26, 2010
By chipsandguacamollie SILVER, Parker, Colorado
chipsandguacamollie SILVER, Parker, Colorado
8 articles 4 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Knowledge is a polite word for dead but not buried imagination." - E. E. Cummings


Bright eyes shine through
A mask of silk feathers.
Through small coy smiles
She is magnetism.

Tiers of ivory lace twirl
Across a polished floor.
Spinning through the dance
She is elegance and grace.

From partner to partner
She offers her gloved hand.
At the end of each dance
She is ambiguity.

The music concludes
When couples take leave.
With kisses on her hand
She is disappearance.


The author's comments:
I wrote this poem after watching the music video for "All the Right Moves," by One Republic. The antiquated and mysterious image of all of the sweeping skirts and masked women was my inspiration.

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on Sep. 5 2010 at 5:56 pm
meganwagner21 PLATINUM, Old Bridge, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes good things have to fall apart so better things can fall together." -Marilyn Monroe
"Nobody can go back and make a new beginning, but anyone can start today and make a new ending." -Maria Robinson

very discriptive. mysterious but understandable. like

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 3:06 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

This poem if filled with lovely imagery while at the same time, telling a story. A few of the words seemed off in tense ("ambiguity" in line 12, and "disappearance" in line 16. "magnetism" in line 4 also seems a little, off. I'm not sure why. I guess I just would have chosen different words with the same meaning). Other than that, it was a very enjoyable read.

riley... GOLD said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 1:33 pm
riley... GOLD, Yakima, Washington
13 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"i became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity." edgar allen poe.

i agree with GangstaEyes... you have loads of talent! the ending of each stanza added a beautiful and haunting element to the poem, and i really enjoyed it! :)

Janee_D BRONZE said...
on Aug. 23 2010 at 10:41 pm
Janee_D BRONZE, Lafayette, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
When nothing goes right, go left !

i really like this poem ! it makes me think, good description !

on Aug. 23 2010 at 8:14 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Wow! This is so good! I love your word choice, and the flow is so smooth. Amazing - definitely keep writing, you've got talent!!

on Aug. 23 2010 at 6:14 pm
amandap PLATINUM, Midlothian, Virginia
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i realy really really love this! I especially love the ends of each stanza, like "she is disappearance" and "she is ambiguity", its really lovely!

on Aug. 23 2010 at 6:10 pm
sunflowergirl7 BRONZE, Lexington, Massachusetts
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"To see the world in a grain of sand and a heaven in a wildflower, hold infinity in the palm of your hand and eternity in an hour.\" --William Blake

The whole poem is great, and I especially love the second stanza, the word choice adds to the beauty and I can really imagine what you are describing. 

Great job!


on Aug. 23 2010 at 7:34 am
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
30 articles 2 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.

Love it =) Great job! I love how you described her and the scene in generally...very, very good. Keep writing!

on Aug. 22 2010 at 10:38 pm
Katie_Grey DIAMOND, Leipsic, Ohio
58 articles 10 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
Difficult is not impossible - Relient K, "Hope for Every Fallen Man"


If all I had was love, would I still be lovely?
If all I gave was love, would you give up on me?
-House of Heroes, "Love is for the Middle Class"

This poem is truly artistic... i love it!

It has a very in depth kind of mystery with beautiful imagery.

great job!


on Aug. 22 2010 at 10:06 pm
Damara...C GOLD, Mings Bight, Other
11 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Accept me for who I am, or, watch me as I go"!

wow awesome i like the description too ur good it kinda reminds me of ballett too

on Aug. 22 2010 at 10:04 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

i like it:)) great word choice!! ^^ it was beautiful, good job!

on Aug. 22 2010 at 9:11 pm
JohnDeereGirl DIAMOND, Westerlo, New York
61 articles 36 photos 216 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I'm not"
"Somewhere betweeen us talking, you saying I deserve better, and you making me laugh when I wanted to cry, I fell in love with you."

This is beautiful! It really reminds me of ballet.

on Aug. 21 2010 at 2:03 am
Minderella PLATINUM, Parker, Colorado
21 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
If I tell you I love you can I keep you forever? --Aww. From the movie Casper
Also:
If you live to be 100, I want to live to be 100 minus 1 day so I never have to live a day without you. --Aww again. Of course, that's Whinnie the Pooh for ya!

I really like how descriptive you are in this poem.  It adds a lot to the message.  Good job :)


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