Perfect This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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Perfect strangers in perfect harmony
You and I would make a perfect “we”
If you think about it illogically
Because logic never helped us see
You and I would make a perfect “we”
Define “perfect” and I think you’ll agree
Because logic never helped us see
The truth of what things are and could be
Now I break this rhyme
Break out of time
Because time is an illusion as you have ­eluded me
I’ll make a new beat
Dance with bare feet
In the rain
Forget my pain
My shame
Each loss without a gain
But I cannot forget
Those burning eyes
That turned my eyes
And churned my mind
Until
All that was left was
A single thought
A single want
A single need
But sometimes fear is more powerful than greed
So I turned aside
Closed my eyes
And mind
Pretended to forget
Pretended there would be no regret
But my action
Or lack of
Was worth regretting
Crying as my sun was setting
Denying me you and denying you me
Denying what could be
Denying us “we”
And if you think about it illogically
All there ever was was
You and Me.

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HisPurePrincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 8, 2011 at 11:09 am
oh my goodness, this works so well.  it's just breaktaking and beautiful.  well done, good words and choice of rhyming, the rhythm is awesome.  i just love it all.
 
SophiaLucia said...
Apr. 1, 2010 at 9:51 pm
I love this. I love how it flows, and the message. All of it [:
 
CherishFaith This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 20, 2009 at 1:39 pm
very good. I'd have to say you are a wise thinker, i can relate. Especially how you know that time is an illusion and in the end love is what matters, not logic. i LOVE it (:
 
writtenchaos said...
Jul. 28, 2009 at 1:09 am
I love this one. Like lovehate29 said, excellent rythm - it pulls everything together.
 
Love2Write said...
Jul. 27, 2009 at 11:38 pm
I absolutly love this poem.
 
YeseniaG said...
Jul. 27, 2009 at 8:36 pm
wow that was great and i do think it flowed quite well
 
literaturenymph said...
Jul. 27, 2009 at 5:52 am
okay, no offense Marika but though I do think your poem is wonderful, and the imagery exercised is brilliant that you could do a bit more editing to make it more flowing and beautiful.
 
CherishFaith This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Nov. 20, 2009 at 1:41 pm
it came right from the mind, without any editing. It shows more emotion and less of trying to make it a "better poem." The writing style is illogical, just like the poem is writing about. So speaking illogically, i think it is perfect.
 
lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 6, 2009 at 8:03 pm
Okay! First, WOOOOOOOOOOOOW. I absolutely, definitely LOVE this piece of yours. The rhythm is just amazing. The image you created is beautiful. The emotions you rose are intense. As I read this piece, I could imagine as much feeling you put into this piece when you're actually reading it. It is amazing, easy to understand, but complex still in a way. It's my favorite. Good job!
 
kookymnstr said...
Jul. 5, 2009 at 12:45 am
I love this poem best ever you should check out some of mine...
 
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