Broken City.

July 22, 2010
By maryannmartinez SILVER, Anaheim, California
maryannmartinez SILVER, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
"dont be afraid to fail , be afraid not to try "


If only you knew how my heart pounds when your around.
If only you knew that shes not worth a second of your time but every second of mine.
If only you knew how you help me get through my day no matter what mood im in or what day it is.
If only you knew it kills me to see you with someone else.
If only you knew every word of yours melts me to falmes...


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on Aug. 18 2010 at 8:44 pm
maryannmartinez SILVER, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
"dont be afraid to fail , be afraid not to try "

thank you very your honesty. (:

your comment means alot.


on Aug. 18 2010 at 8:36 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

First of all, I like the title. Second of all, if you hadn't pointed out all the spelling errors and punctuation errors, I probably wouldn't have noticed them as badly. THis is great. I wish you hadn't second guessed yourself. I loved the story behind it, and the poem was short enough that I didn't mind the repetition of "if only you knew". Great job. And I can (unfortunately) relate to this poem... way more than I should. Good job, and STOP SECOND GUESSING AND CRITIQUING YOURSELF!!!

But if you ever get the chance to critique someone else's work... (coughcough) like mine, that would be greatly appreciated. :)


on Aug. 16 2010 at 11:40 am
maryannmartinez SILVER, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
"dont be afraid to fail , be afraid not to try "

i messed up on this one VERY badly the title is all wrong and i spelled some words incorrectly. i apologize.


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