Broken City.

If only you knew how my heart pounds when your around.
If only you knew that shes not worth a second of your time but every second of mine.
If only you knew how you help me get through my day no matter what mood im in or what day it is.
If only you knew it kills me to see you with someone else.
If only you knew every word of yours melts me to falmes...

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sleeplessdreamer said...
Aug. 18, 2010 at 8:36 pm:

First of all, I like the title. Second of all, if you hadn't pointed out all the spelling errors and punctuation errors, I probably wouldn't have noticed them as badly. THis is great. I wish you hadn't second guessed yourself. I loved the story behind it, and the poem was short enough that I didn't mind the repetition of "if only you knew". Great job. And I can (unfortunately) relate to this poem... way more than I should. Good job, and STOP SECOND GUESSING AND CRITIQUING YOURSELF!!!

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maryannmartinez replied...
Aug. 18, 2010 at 8:44 pm :

thank you very your honesty. (:

your comment means alot.

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maryannm said...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 11:40 am:

i messed up on this one VERY badly the title is all wrong and i spelled some words incorrectly. i apologize.