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Alone

July 20, 2010
By CynthiaLynnILY PLATINUM, Moore, Oklahoma
CynthiaLynnILY PLATINUM, Moore, Oklahoma
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Just a small one,
Seperated from the others.

A World forever torn,
a life apart from his siters and brothers.


The author's comments:
I was trying to understand a fish when I wrote this. He was in a school of fish but for a split second. But he wasen't paying attention, and the other fish left him behind.

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on Aug. 20 2010 at 8:18 pm
CynthiaLynnILY PLATINUM, Moore, Oklahoma
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Thanks. :) But that wasen't the whole thing, it was a little longer. But I might leave it since it is ''mysterious''. Thanks again sleeplessdreamer. I love your work. It's beautiful.

on Aug. 14 2010 at 6:01 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

The poem was good, and I really liked the fact it was so short. But it really makes you think, because you don't know what is going on. 

I am amazed at back story to this poem, how your mind worked with the fish analogy... just thought I'd commend you for your thought process. 

Great job. Check out my work if you ever get the chance!