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July 11, 2010
By JakeShaw PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
JakeShaw PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
When you're in a night that seems almost devoid of stars and you look but can't find someone to help you see. Look for that lonely star and let it guide you until you find the light. (anonymous)


Rising up towards the sky,
Invisible to the naked eye.
The soul that died a peaceful death,
After having comfortably taken its
last breath.

Ascending to a lofty place,
After passing through life's


challenging race.
It will finally find a place to rest,
But first it must pass a final test.

The angel standing at the gate.
Tells him he'll have to wait.
For there is just one last question,
Which must be a man's most candid confession.

The angel looks deep in his heart,
And asks if he's been a man apart.
Had he done for his family all that a man should?
Or did he just do what he thought he could?

The man looks back and cries,
Tears of sorrow flowing from his eyes.
To his surprise the door opens wide,
And the angel escorts him deep inside.

The angel looks back to the man,
And says sometimes it's ok to do what you can.


The author's comments:
Just a short thought about the measure of a man and weather he can decide if he has done his best in life.

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on Apr. 20 2012 at 4:06 am
Wildflower30 SILVER, Kolkata, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Create your own sayings, for only then do they make sense most. ---- Me

This is a modern and simple way to depict such spirituality. I like the last line. :)

Hotti3 said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 4:36 pm
Hotti3, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Amazing. I had chills the entire time. Great message--sometimes it is ok to do just what you can

wendy said...
on Aug. 25 2010 at 9:58 am
I love how expressive you are in your poetry.  Keep it up!

Anjo! SILVER said...
on Aug. 12 2010 at 3:49 pm
Anjo! SILVER, Roseburg, Oregon
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love the story, love the words, love the outline of your spacing. I LOVE IT!! one of the best i've seen =] Keep writing please!!!

on Aug. 11 2010 at 9:52 am
JakeShaw PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
23 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
When you're in a night that seems almost devoid of stars and you look but can't find someone to help you see. Look for that lonely star and let it guide you until you find the light. (anonymous)

Of course id love to read some of yours!

beccaboo56 said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 1:29 pm
This is great! I loved it

on Aug. 9 2010 at 10:05 pm
punkr0cker365 ELITE, Bedford, New York
100 articles 2 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I am not."
Kurt Cobain

You're a great writer, I love this poem. If you get the chance, would you read some of mine?

on Aug. 9 2010 at 9:53 pm
JakeShaw PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
23 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
When you're in a night that seems almost devoid of stars and you look but can't find someone to help you see. Look for that lonely star and let it guide you until you find the light. (anonymous)

I'd love to check out some of yours and im glad you see a correlation to the title!  

on Aug. 9 2010 at 9:11 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

this has a very calm tone, quite akin to the title.... read some of mine?

on Aug. 8 2010 at 7:31 am
JakeShaw PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
23 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
When you're in a night that seems almost devoid of stars and you look but can't find someone to help you see. Look for that lonely star and let it guide you until you find the light. (anonymous)

Thanks! I'm glad you like it. I read some of your work and you really portray emotion really well in you work

im_me BRONZE said...
on Aug. 6 2010 at 12:13 pm
im_me BRONZE, Lakeview, Michigan
4 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
“When one door of happiness closes, another opens; But often we look so long at the closed door that we do not see the one that has been opened for us”

This is amazing I loved it!

on Aug. 6 2010 at 9:49 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

This is a wonderful poem. I was awestruck at the last part of it; you finished the poem so well. Your rhythm was great too.

on Aug. 6 2010 at 7:53 am
Francesca BRONZE, Clermont, Florida
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Thought provoking.

on Aug. 6 2010 at 7:39 am
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 501 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

wow every part about this is simply amazing!! i love your format, rthym, and rhyme (sorry about spelling). the whole meaning of this is fantastic and you put it in such a wonderful, smooth, way. It has a great flow to it like no other!!! please check out some of my work if you get the chance-i think that we have a similar style. Please check out 'words unspoken'.


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