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Rising up towards the sky,
Invisible to the naked eye.
The soul that died a peaceful death,
After having comfortably taken its
last breath.

Ascending to a lofty place,
After passing through life's

challenging race.
It will finally find a place to rest,
But first it must pass a final test.

The angel standing at the gate.
Tells him he'll have to wait.
For there is just one last question,
Which must be a man's most candid confession.

The angel looks deep in his heart,
And asks if he's been a man apart.
Had he done for his family all that a man should?
Or did he just do what he thought he could?

The man looks back and cries,
Tears of sorrow flowing from his eyes.
To his surprise the door opens wide,
And the angel escorts him deep inside.

The angel looks back to the man,
And says sometimes it's ok to do what you can.

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Wildflower30 said...
Apr. 20, 2012 at 4:06 am
This is a modern and simple way to depict such spirituality. I like the last line. :)
Hotti3 said...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 4:36 pm
Amazing. I had chills the entire time. Great message--sometimes it is ok to do just what you can
wendy said...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 9:58 am
I love how expressive you are in your poetry.  Keep it up!
Anjo! said...
Aug. 12, 2010 at 3:49 pm
love the story, love the words, love the outline of your spacing. I LOVE IT!! one of the best i've seen =] Keep writing please!!!
beccaboo56 said...
Aug. 10, 2010 at 1:29 pm
This is great! I loved it
AnniexxAwesome said...
Aug. 9, 2010 at 10:05 pm
You're a great writer, I love this poem. If you get the chance, would you read some of mine?
JakeShaw replied...
Aug. 11, 2010 at 9:52 am
Of course id love to read some of yours!
Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 9, 2010 at 9:11 pm
this has a very calm tone, quite akin to the title.... read some of mine?
JakeShaw replied...
Aug. 9, 2010 at 9:53 pm
I'd love to check out some of yours and im glad you see a correlation to the title!  
JakeShaw said...
Aug. 8, 2010 at 7:31 am
Thanks! I'm glad you like it. I read some of your work and you really portray emotion really well in you work
heather_me said...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 12:13 pm
This is amazing I loved it!
Thesilentraven This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 9:49 am
This is a wonderful poem. I was awestruck at the last part of it; you finished the poem so well. Your rhythm was great too.
Francesca said...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 7:53 am
Thought provoking.
Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 7:39 am
wow every part about this is simply amazing!! i love your format, rthym, and rhyme (sorry about spelling). the whole meaning of this is fantastic and you put it in such a wonderful, smooth, way. It has a great flow to it like no other!!! please check out some of my work if you get the chance-i think that we have a similar style. Please check out 'words unspoken'.
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