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Beneath It All

I want to cry but the tears won't fall as I look at pictures of you up on my wall.

Your smile shows and carries love all the way as I think back to when we were two that day.

Now a hidden face is all I see, as I look closer and realize you hurt me.





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Anjo! said...
Aug. 10, 2010 at 3:19 am
soooo good. love the rhyming in it. it would be even MORE amazing if you split the paragraphs in half so the ends of the lines rhyme. it would flow way more easlier and awesomer haha. keep writing, you gotta gift. =] 
 
Daydreamer14 replied...
Aug. 10, 2010 at 12:58 pm
Thanks, that means a lot!:) And, yeah I don't know why I didn't do that in the first place.
 
Dreamer13 said...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 10:03 am
I think your poem is very thought provoking. It really made me think about what the poem was trying to say. Keep writing!! :)
 
Daydreamer14 replied...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 5:14 pm
Thanks! I plan on it;)
 
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