Bitterly Torn

July 31, 2010
By Anonymous

I loved you and lied
Which has torn my insides
My heart thumped when we talked
But now it’s trapped shut with locks
I’ll live so be happy for me and you
Since we just threw out what was true
The tears that ran down my cheeks
Don’t worry, it was just a leak
I know my bitter sarcasm won’t do much
But it makes up for love and as such
Good bye my once faithful love
Now you don’t have to deal with my ‘stuff’



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on Aug. 5 2010 at 7:54 pm
emmacxoxo PLATINUM, Chelsea, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Okay. Okay.

this was really good, it reflected how ive felt fr a long time. awesome job...check out sum of my stuff if u want

on Aug. 5 2010 at 3:49 pm
Jaredwritescoolstuff BRONZE, Lakewood, Colorado
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I definitly think some of the best poems come out of this simplicity, I really liked the emotion you got across, if you are thinking about revising, maybe a little more concrete images would be effective, maybe to describe who the speaker is talking to/about. Great poem!

on Aug. 4 2010 at 11:04 pm
chastity SILVER, Beckley, West Virginia
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take me as i am or take me as i leave

wow ilove it its really expressed check some of mine out

 


on Aug. 4 2010 at 8:39 pm
crubs33 DIAMOND, Lido Beach, New York
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"The most courageous act is still to think for yourself. Aloud."- Coco Chanel
Life isn't about surviving the storm, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

This is so amazing!! i love the emotion and description!!! If you could please rate and comment on my work that would be great!! thanks and ur sooo good!!!

on Aug. 4 2010 at 5:33 pm
MercedesXO DIAMOND, South Easton, Massachusetts
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"I realize that life is risks. It's acknowledging the past but looking forward. It's taking chances that we will make mistakes but believeing we all deserve to be forgiven."
-The Dead Tossed Waves.

this is great!! i love the ending and how you tie it all in. the somplicity and the truth behind it is awesome. great work:)

i'd love it if you (or anyone else reading this) could check out some of my work. especially my poem 'Tortuer of a King' appriciated:)


emi-chan GOLD said...
on Aug. 4 2010 at 11:04 am
emi-chan GOLD, Brownsville, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
the world ended when you said nothing

Thanks! All I did was take what I've felt or seen and I guess that's where the simplicity comes from

on Aug. 3 2010 at 11:51 pm
Collado92 PLATINUM, Ft.pierce, Florida
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I really like this, I have totally felt this way b4 I like the simplcity and the way you get the point across, nice work.

 

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