Lost Body

July 6, 2010
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I forgot who I was
Where I was
And to where i was going
Time was a matter of little importance
No feeling, numbness
Absolutely nothing.
I fought to continue standing
A statue on the verge of crippling
Lost, in a blanket of darkness--
Where are you?
My body is bleeding
From the heart, inside out
My eyes are seething
Frozen in place
To shutter they shout
I do not respond.
Frantically searching,
Body elapsing back into motion
Stiffened motions, robotic like.
Feeling, straining, recollection of anything,
My hands scrape the rock and dirt, Bark and trees,
Then stop, remaining empty handed.
Eyes rejuvenated with water,
They feel better I do not.
I envy them and their minuscule abilities
Ah sight, a wondrous glory
Yet no feelings of worry or doubt
They are lucky,
Given one purpose to fulfill,
And always they succeed.
I crawl to my nearest destination
A rock embedded by moss, neighboring a puddle.
My encrusted feel bathe in the water,
They are soothed, to a mild extent.
My eyes, they search and wander
Brain replying with little bother.
No help? My good friend,
My only knack of knowledge,
Of memories and life giving,
Remaining a disappointment with too little fulfilling.
The scampering of monstrous feel
Amounting the pounding pressure of my heart,
The now eerie quietness
The world rotating together with me apart.
No longer the pressure to please,
Or the hope of something grander
At last surrendering myself to the lighthearted breeze,
Death's lost body with no satisfying answer.





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MelanieLouise This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 2, 2010 at 9:52 am
breathtaking, i, too love the rawness of it. you are a great writer, check out my stuff if you want or get a chance :) keep writing, Mel
 
MercedesXO replied...
Aug. 2, 2010 at 7:50 pm
thank you! and i will deffinitely check out your work as well!!
 
GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 2, 2010 at 7:52 am
Wow! This is so powerful and deep. The emotion is strong and captivating. GREAT work. Maybe you could check out some of my stuff? Thanks and definitely keep writing and you'll have plenty of people reading!
 
MercedesXO replied...
Aug. 2, 2010 at 7:45 pm
thank you! and i will most deff check out your work as well:)
 
christin.bass said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 6:14 pm
Wow this gave me goose bumps. Your work is very vivid and raw, it was amazing. Keep writing because i will definitely be back and reading. (:
 
MercedesXO replied...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 7:44 pm
thank you so much for viewing my work and leaving a nice comment:) i REALLYY appriciate the way you described it, and that you really enjoed it. thank you so much for that. and i'd love to see your work so i'm gunna go view it right now:) thanks again!
 
crubs3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 2:04 pm
OMg i love this its so descriptive and emotional!!! if you could please rate and comment on my work that would be great!!! thanks and ur really good!!!
 
MercedesXO replied...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 3:09 pm
thanks so much!! that means a lot to me and yeah ill most deffinitely check out your work:)
 
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