Clean MAG

June 16, 2010
By silenceandnoise SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
silenceandnoise SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 5 comments

i'll curl up
in the dishwasher

somewhere in
between the

plates and bowls
and you'll start

the heavy duty cycle
because maybe

after hours of hot
water scalding me

i'll finally
be clean enough

for you.



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on Jul. 18 2014 at 10:41 pm
theSunfloweredCrow PLATINUM, Green Bay, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Can't keep my eyes from the circling sky,
Tongue-tied and twisted
Just an earth-bound misfit, I"
~Pink Floyd

"Now is blessed
The rest
remembered "

~Jim Morrison

I didsagree with both of the people that commented. I think your poem was extremely creative imaginative and the length was perfect. Short sweet and to the point. Very economical. :)

on Sep. 29 2011 at 11:51 am
trigger19 SILVER, Easley, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Keep your head high people will love to see u fall

I love you crearive it this a good piece

 


on Aug. 31 2011 at 8:01 pm
AbstractFragment GOLD, Dalmatia,, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"You know what it feels like when all your teeth are falling out really slowly and you don't realize and then you notice that, well, they're really far apart. And then one day... you don't have any teeth anymore." - Where the Wild Things Are

I dis-agree with Lilly's comment in that it needs more, because I definately feel there is a solid enough argument here but it needs to be more solid. I believe you need to work on some flow, but other than that I olike your style.

on Aug. 31 2011 at 1:54 pm
Lilly3217 SILVER, Holly Hill, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
The best time to plant a Oak tree was twenty years ago the second best time is today.

I like your creativeness but it needs MORE. keep working and you will be great




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