you said foever

June 23, 2010
By chastity SILVER, Beckley, West Virginia
chastity SILVER, Beckley, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
take me as i am or take me as i leave

what happened to forever
you seemed so clever
the way you kissed me
i thought you could see
how much you meant to me
i thought i was your everything
but it turned out i was nothing
you promied never to leave
and i begged please
but you still didnt see
if you knew how i felt about you
you would be so blue
but i see you didnt get the clue
that i really really love you!

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on Aug. 5 2010 at 7:09 am
VickyLove92 PLATINUM, Green Bay, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
once life gets harsh/hard, hold your head strong because that's all you can do

i love feeling dat rite now. goshhh this is gud. i could so relate to it<3

on Jul. 27 2010 at 7:08 pm
JohnDeereGirl DIAMOND, Westerlo, New York
61 articles 36 photos 216 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I'm not"
"Somewhere betweeen us talking, you saying I deserve better, and you making me laugh when I wanted to cry, I fell in love with you."

You have great ideas, and plotting, but it would help a lot if you didn't make every line rythm, and if you capatalized each new sentence. It would just draw the eye to it more and make it look professional. Five stars!

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