you said foever

June 23, 2010
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what happened to forever
you seemed so clever
the way you kissed me
i thought you could see
how much you meant to me
i thought i was your everything
but it turned out i was nothing
you promied never to leave
and i begged please
but you still didnt see
if you knew how i felt about you
you would be so blue
but i see you didnt get the clue
that i really really love you!

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MidnightAngel7 said...
Jul. 27, 2010 at 7:08 pm
You have great ideas, and plotting, but it would help a lot if you didn't make every line rythm, and if you capatalized each new sentence. It would just draw the eye to it more and make it look professional. Five stars!
asiangurl replied...
Aug. 5, 2010 at 7:09 am
i love feeling dat rite now. goshhh this is gud. i could so relate to it<3
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