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When I peddled determinedly, on my first wheels,
When all I wanted to wear, was sparkly princess heels,
When I sat in my crib, and spoke my first word,
When I was overly loud, just wanting to be heard.
When I was always happy, a smile on my face,
When I was Running whole heartedly, winning my first race.
When I was untiringly studying, using all my time,
When I was striving to be the best, wanting nothing but prime.
When I drew every day, with a giant imagination,
When all I did was decisive, no hesitation.
When I would wake from a nightmare, scared as can be,
When I was desperate for adventure, I pretended to sail the sea.
When I was happy with life, simply as it was,
When I would outbreak singing, really just because.
When I collected shells, for the love of their beauty,
When all I wanted was chocolate, absolutely nothing fruity.
When I was just me, that being all I knew,
It was just the beginning; I had a lifetime to go through.


Take me back and show me how,
How oh how I’m different from now.
Take me back and let me see,
See who I used to be.



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Bouskiegirl said...
Sept. 13, 2010 at 8:09 pm:
THis is great.. thanks for checking out my work, I loved you are amazing!
 
Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 17, 2010 at 5:31 pm :
wow thakyou so much that really means alot!!!
 
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kiwi12 said...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 8:56 pm:

When all I wanted was chocolate, absolutely nothing fruity.

thats my favorite line. :)

 
Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 9:21 pm :
lol i've heard that before...hahah:)
 
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Shahed said...
Aug. 5, 2010 at 9:14 pm:

Honestly, I read it twice! All the "when's" are wonderful! The rhyming schyme is amazing! .. I love reading your work!

Again, let me know when you have some more.. good luck with all my heart :)

 
Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 5, 2010 at 11:06 pm :
wow thankyou so much it means alot:)
 
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asiangurl said...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 1:00 pm:
wow, i love it. i feel da same way, i missed it when i was more naive n younger n thought guys had cootles n such n i miss the old me fa real...keep it up n genius idea of a poem
 
Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 6:33 pm :
wow thankyou so much-it really does mean alot-i think you might also like 'stay for tomorrow' and 'You wouldn't expect' also:)
 
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SharpieMan said...
Jul. 31, 2010 at 11:35 am:
Very Good!!!! I really liked it! Wanted Chocolate, aboslutely nothing fruity. Favorite line!! Keep it up! I await more!
 
Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 6:31 pm :
wow, thankyou so much:) i think that you might like 'you wouldn't expect' if you liked this-they are very similary written:) you might also like 'stay for tomorrow'
 
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blankpages12 said...
Jul. 22, 2010 at 6:01 am:

i really like this..its just plain ol' cretivity at its best...

and the point your making you do an amazing job of making it... i especially love the line that says i had a lifetime to go through...its just i love that line=]

 
Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 22, 2010 at 6:44 am :
Wow thankyou so much!! that really means alot! i think you might also like 'you wouldn't expect' check it out if you get the chance!:)
 
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